Thanks for the battle Tucson, you're story definitely has legs. Thanks for the amazing prompt Photon. Thanks everyone who read and voted. I'm going to throw this baby in the workshop if anyone wants to take a second look. I've got to edit my buddies MFA thesis (He's a sculpter not a writer) but when I finish I'll be ready to do battle again. I'll toss a challenge up probably next week. Thanks again everyone!!!
Matt's absolutely right. These two were virtually even. I haven't had such a hard time picking between stories, but in the end, Riley's gave me more to work with. Mechanically, they both need a lot of polishing, but they both have great concepts. Riley's just explored his concept more, and in the end, it's easier to pare down than it is to flesh out. That being said, I really want to see Campsite fleshed out. Robin could really be taken in a lot of cool directions.
Thanks for reading. Thanks for battling, Jonathan. Your story was great, as I've told you. Great voice, great concept. Having said that, I think it's clear I can never come here again.
No, I'm joking. I need to do more battles. I need to write more. And I believe the need to become a paying member has come up. Workhop my way to victory.
Dude, we're all so serious about it being WAY closer than the numbers. Had you guys been close in length, I think a lot of votes would have been changed. That's not to say that more is always better, just that there is too big a hurdle to overcome when someone else has unwrapped the story further. This may be a good argument for having word count minimums as well as maximums.
Please, do not see my post as an attempt to gain compliments or excuses. I'm really pleased that you all read my story and that the better story won. I'm not sad about it. I know where my strenght and weaknesses are, but it is nice to come out of the shell once in a while. And when I say this has encouraged me to become a paying member and do some workshops, you should all consider that as a compliment, because it means I value your opinions and critiques.
