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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland May 25, 2015 - 5:17pm
Swallowing Teeth - by Jonathan Riley
91% (10 votes)
Campsite - by Tucson
9% (1 vote)
Total votes: 11

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland May 25, 2015 - 5:58pm

PROMPT:

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Tucson from Belgium is reading Late Essays - J.M. Coetzee May 26, 2015 - 12:32pm

Thanks for putting it up. Posting the prompt again is a good idea. I had to look it up in the previous battle. (Or perhaps it was written somewhere and I just missed it)

Let the battle begin.

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt May 26, 2015 - 1:29pm

Read, voted. Good job, guys!

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Fritz May 26, 2015 - 2:11pm

In

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics May 26, 2015 - 3:16pm

Okay... I am SO stuck. I simply cannot decide on this one.

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voodoo_em from England is reading All the books by Tana French! May 27, 2015 - 2:31am

Voted :)

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest May 27, 2015 - 12:56pm

Read. Voted. Nice job, fellas.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland May 29, 2015 - 9:05pm

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SamaLamaWama from Dallas is reading Something Wicked This Way Comes May 30, 2015 - 3:34pm

Voted!

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voodoo_em from England is reading All the books by Tana French! June 1, 2015 - 6:24am

Bump

         Bump

                  Bump!

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland June 1, 2015 - 8:22am

Poll closes tonight arround 7 pm cst I believe, last chance to get your vote in peeps!

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland June 1, 2015 - 5:43pm

Thanks for the battle Tucson, you're story definitely has legs. Thanks for the amazing prompt Photon. Thanks everyone who read and voted. I'm going to throw this baby in the workshop if anyone wants to take a second look. I've got to edit my buddies MFA thesis (He's a sculpter not a writer) but when I finish I'll be ready to do battle again. I'll toss a challenge up probably next week. Thanks again everyone!!!

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MattF from Tokyo is reading Borges' Collected Fictions June 2, 2015 - 5:15am

Both interesting stories. Tucson, though I voted for Jonathan's, you should know the stories were a lot closer in quality than the final tally would indicate. Nice work guys.

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics June 2, 2015 - 6:40am

Matt's absolutely right. These two were virtually even. I haven't had such a hard time picking between stories, but in the end, Riley's gave me more to work with. Mechanically, they both need a lot of polishing, but they both have great concepts. Riley's just explored his concept more, and in the end, it's easier to pare down than it is to flesh out. That being said, I really want to see Campsite fleshed out. Robin could really be taken in a lot of cool directions.

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Tucson from Belgium is reading Late Essays - J.M. Coetzee June 2, 2015 - 10:31am

Thanks for reading. Thanks for battling, Jonathan. Your story was great, as I've told you. Great voice, great concept. Having said that, I think it's clear I can never come here again.

No, I'm joking. I need to do more battles. I need to write more. And I believe the need to become a paying member has come up. Workhop my way to victory.

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics June 2, 2015 - 10:50am

Dude, we're all so serious about it being WAY closer than the numbers. Had you guys been close in length, I think a lot of votes would have been changed. That's not to say that more is always better, just that there is too big a hurdle to overcome when someone else has unwrapped the story further. This may be a good argument for having word count minimums as well as maximums.

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Tucson from Belgium is reading Late Essays - J.M. Coetzee June 2, 2015 - 12:38pm

Please, do not see my post as an attempt to gain compliments or excuses. I'm really pleased that you all read my story and that the better story won. I'm not sad about it. I know where my strenght and weaknesses are, but it is nice to come out of the shell once in a while. And when I say this has encouraged me to become a paying member and do some workshops, you should all consider that as a compliment, because it means I value your opinions and critiques.