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The Biting

By sorrel nielsen in Scare Us

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Jane Wiseman's picture
Jane Wiseman from living outside of Albuquerque/in Minneapolis is reading Look to Windward by Iain M. Banks July 27, 2012 - 5:44pm

That's just amazing. Amazing writing. Thanks.

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sorrel nielsen July 29, 2012 - 11:35am

Thank you so much -- I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Shawn I. from New York is reading Important Things That Don't Matter July 31, 2012 - 7:28pm

Awesome. Really liked the dark yet calm and sinister tone. My only criticism, if you can even call it that, would be the line "My lip was bleeding into my mouth" on the second page seemed kind of random. There was no lead in or out as to why. Maybe it was the biting cold or anxious gnawing at her lip. Just thought it either needed more or could be scrapped altogther. All in all, extremely enjoyable. Thanks.