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Bugging Out

By Ben Currier in Scare Us

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Something is not right in a house where a new reality T.V. show is being filmed.  

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Jane Wiseman from Danville Virginia--now living outside of Albuquerque/in Minneapolis is reading Kindred, by Octavia Butler August 1, 2012 - 11:00pm

haha, this is really fun! I like it a lot. It's well-written, it's really creepy, and it also has a lot of interesting information about video editing and the underbelly of reality tv in it. I love stories full of information. They seem more real to me. Thanks for posting it.

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Ben Currier from North Lake Tahoe is reading First as Tragedy then as Farce August 4, 2012 - 8:58pm

Thanks for reading. I'm glad you found it informative. It was a really fun plot to write. 

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Jane Wiseman from Danville Virginia--now living outside of Albuquerque/in Minneapolis is reading Kindred, by Octavia Butler August 5, 2012 - 5:14am

I think it's such a shame that no one else has read this. I think it's because you submitted your story right as a whole lot of other stories were being submitted, so people were working their way to yours, and then suddenly there was a flood of last- minute submissions that essentially buried yours. Your story is so good!

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Regina Peacecraft from the Philippines is reading Android Karenina August 6, 2012 - 6:38am

You've taken a really great deal of inspiration from Haunted for this piece. Well I liked it (because I really liked Haunted too) but it's too similar to Chuck Palahniuk's book that it doesn't seem original anymore; from strangers living in one house for some project to the limited communication to the outside world (phones confiscated), the protaganist sacrificing the others for the sake of his selfish dream, the informative stuff you injected into the story to make it seem more real. But well, I guess it takes a good writer to sound like Chuck.

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Ben Currier from North Lake Tahoe is reading First as Tragedy then as Farce August 7, 2012 - 8:49pm

Thanks, I didn't even realize. I was not trying to make a Whittier-esque main character, but it can easily be read that way. Thatll be the first thing I tackle in revision.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland August 14, 2012 - 6:29am

It may have been a bit like Haunted but more like a gentle nod not like.a copycat. To me it was more of a horror parody of the real world or jersey shore and it was very well done. Love the.descriptions of when the.bugs go to.work. If your protaginist was whitieresque i think he'd somehow be responsible for the.attack and clearly he was not. This story was alot of fun and I really enjoyed it.
--Jonathan--

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Wonder Woman from RI is reading 20th Century Ghosts August 14, 2012 - 7:06am

This story has left me feeling itchy and grossed out! It's nicely written and flows so well. I loved your ending and you did a great job describing the bugs and their nastiness as well as the more mundane, everyday work of the main character. All great details that made a sickeningly great story!

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sean of the dead from Madisonville, KY is reading Peckerwood, by Jed Ayres August 14, 2012 - 4:39pm

The horror part of this story was pretty cool.  I'm more a fan of the style, and the skewering of reality tv.  You did something impressive here, you started the story so far away from horror that, when the creatures came along, I had forgotten it was going to be a horror story.  That's not a complaint, not at all.  I like this story a lot.  I wished it had gone on longer with the tv aspect though, I really dug that.

But I do like the horror aspect as well.  Maybe because it was creepy.  Maybe because it meant the reality tv "stars" all got theirs.  But either way, nice work.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland August 14, 2012 - 5:10pm

I felt the same way as sean. Actually i remembered thinking when i was done with it that I wished it hadn't been a horror story becuase there was so much you could do with your concept and theme in the "house" but the horror was really good too.