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Brother's Keeper

By valerieashe in Scare Us

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Description

Mysterious murders occur in the New Mexico desert at the hands of seemingly innocent Angus--a young, orphaned biogeneticist working at one of the premier research labs in the United States.

Comments

Jane Wiseman's picture
Jane Wiseman from living outside of Albuquerque/in Minneapolis is reading Look to Windward by Iain M. Banks August 1, 2012 - 11:14pm

Really interesting and well-written. Thanks for posting it.

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valerieashe August 7, 2012 - 10:37am

Thank you, Jane, and thank you for your comment! I really enjoyed reading your story, "Hatch", as well. So well-written and effectively scary and disgusting. I recently joined LitReactor and look forward to reading more of your work.

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valerieashe August 7, 2012 - 10:37am

Thank you, Jane, and thank you for your comment! I really enjoyed reading your story, "Hatch", as well. So well-written and effectively scary and disgusting. I recently joined LitReactor and look forward to reading more of your work.

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Selaine Henriksen August 2, 2012 - 3:28pm

I enjoyed this. It feels like it could be expanded into a larger story.

 

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Robert Blake from Glasgow originally, last wee while Manchester is reading The Sea Hawk (Rafael Sabatini) August 7, 2012 - 7:49am

I think this story needs to be expanded. After the protagonist realises there is something wrong, it hurtles along, but I got a sense of it being cut down to fit, with explantations, demonstrations and some sense of what is happening falling to keep the word count down.

 

That did not stop me enjoying the story, it has to be said