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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks May 5, 2012 - 10:20am

I'm going on a review spree today. If anyone would return the favor (preferably on my Thunderdome piece, but I won't say no to a last-minute review of mine and Bill's Team Slayer submission) I'd seriously appreciate it. Meredith came through and reviewed my Thunderdome, but I still need reviews.

Thanks!

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks May 5, 2012 - 11:11am

Literally none of the stories will open on my work computer. It gives me some bullshit about choosing an "encoding" language and then won't let me open it. So... no reviews today.

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Meredith_103 May 5, 2012 - 11:24am

I am trying to catch up on reviews today. Last week something or another (maybe the S&M story about Fifty Shades of Grey) set off the blocked site trigger, so I couldn't go to LitReactor at all on my work PC. Such total bullshit. I guess I'll have to go talk to the security guys on Monday.

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Jimothy Scott from Canada is reading The Anatomy of Story by John Truby May 5, 2012 - 5:28pm

Hi all,

I'm looking to get maybe two more reviews on my story Paper boats. It's less than 2500 words. It's a literary short story. I'm thinking I might try to publish it so reviews that would help it in that aspect would be great.

Thanks

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks May 5, 2012 - 6:28pm

Garrett, I reviewed your story. Whatever format it was in is readable by this piece-of-shit computer.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 3:54am

All the Angels

By: Dale
In: Noir, Novella 1 reviews
1 new
A hardboiled novella set in 1940s L.A., following a bent PI, working as a bagman for Mickey Cohen. He's approached by a German immigrant on the run who needs his help to hide from the Feds.

BEYOND THUNDERDOME: Batflower vs. Courtney: The Split (rough draft)

By: Batflower
In: Magical Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
3 new
Prompt: It arrived on the current. In a town that has become detached from reality, a strange ship comes down the river bearing an evil cargo. (2500 words)

 

17 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Last Section

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
1 new
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is constantly enthralled by the power of pretty girls. 7,200 words (the last 5 snipits).

Thoughtless

By: Matthew Huffer
In: Flash Fiction, Sci-fi 2 reviews
2 new
I wrote this when I saw a post on my facebook about a 250 word flash fiction contest. I forgot the piece was to be based on a particular topic and wrote this instead.

 

Prologue

By: jdudley
In: Fantasy, Novel Excerpt 2 reviews
2 new
Overlong prologue for a potential Fantasy/Adventure novel

 

BEYOND THUNDERDOME: Courtney v Batflower -- rough

By: Courtney
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
2 new
Prompt: It arrived on the current. // A 2,519 word story about fate, based on the first time I enjoyed sex.

 

Hotrods and Zombies

By: cdregan
In: Sci-fi, Short Story 2 reviews
3 new
A sport for the post-apocalypse. 2300 words.

 

Team Slayer: Meredith & Rach V. Courtney & Bill- Rough

By: rach122
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
3 new
2500 Words-"My Pretty Girl"-A woman finds herself in a familiar place and is overcome with memories.

 

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 8:44am

Also, I may post part of a novel I'm working on. Danny and Pandrew have seen parts of it, along with  someone else, but I still need to work up the courage. I'm 100 pages in, that's a lot of work for something that could turn out as "man this sucks, kill yourself"

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 6, 2012 - 1:37pm

It's a lot of work, yes, but if I've been following the threads correctly you were 60 pages in early last week.  So if you find out you have some re-work to do, it probably won't involve more than a week with that kind of output.  Don't sweat it.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 2:33pm

Maybe when I finish. I am still iffy right now. 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 6, 2012 - 2:36pm

I suggest posting some of it before you finish.  Hear me out, I'm being sincere.  When you finish a WHOLE BOOK, and then try to go back and edit, it is MUCH HARDER (in my awesome opinion) than it is to edit as you go.

 

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce May 6, 2012 - 3:03pm

yeah, for all those who want a longer story, I polished the GGD opening.

review, plox

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 3:19pm

@Jessica . I get what you're saying. It just a weird book. It is basically a complete rewrite of something you reviewed before. I mean a TOTAL rewrite. The main character is even alone most of the time, which is strange to write, let alone with my style....Maybe I'll go through the first 5000 words and post.....not to mention the subject matter. It's like a post apocalyptic story set during the civil war. I have never once been nervous posting anything. Not once. But in this case I am and I am not sure why. 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 3:22pm

Fuck it, I'll post. Give me a little bit to edit. 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 6, 2012 - 3:53pm

"It's like a post apocalyptic story set during the civil war."

That made me laugh.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 4:11pm

See! SEE! 

That's it, I'm not posting it. I hatecherface. 

 

It's just odd. Danny and Pandrew have gotten looks here and there. I don't know, I'll mull it over. 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 6, 2012 - 4:36pm

"That's it, I'm not posting it."

If that bothered you that much, I'd say the only thing to do is put on your big girl panties and stop being such a sissy. 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 6, 2012 - 4:51pm

LOL @ AD

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. May 6, 2012 - 5:45pm

I want some big girl panties!

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 6, 2012 - 5:47pm

Your exclamation point disappoints me.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. May 6, 2012 - 6:59pm

I'm an excitable boy.

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Alex Kane from west-central Illinois is reading Dark Orbit May 6, 2012 - 7:03pm

I've only got 3 reviews on "Nootropic Software Blues" so far. If you're looking for something strange to get you thinking about memory, pain, and the future, you might like it. Yes, I'm begging for critiques. Don't judge me.

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Meredith_103 May 6, 2012 - 7:06pm

I'm also begging. I posted "Lights" which was written by Rach and myself. We had fun writing this piece but are desperate for feedback. Please, please, please.

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce May 7, 2012 - 2:23am

 rage because    no reviews.

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Grigori Black from US is reading Radium Girls by Amanda Gowin May 7, 2012 - 2:24am

Also, I may post part of a novel I'm working on. Danny and Pandrew have seen parts of it, along with  someone else, but I still need to work up the courage. I'm 100 pages in, that's a lot of work for something that could turn out as "man this sucks, kill yourself"

What? I don't get to play too? I'm quite happy to crush your hopes and dreams read it over.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 4:31am

I might rewrite, yet again. Maybe I should just give up on the idea or something. I don't know. Confused. 

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 7, 2012 - 5:47am

Senor Attack, do you like your novel?

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 7, 2012 - 5:50am

"Maybe I should just give up on the idea or something. I don't know. Confused."

Or maybe....

you should put it in the workshop and let other people tell you to give up. 

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 5:53am

you should put it in the workshop and let other people tell you to give up."

 

Bwhahahaha, hatecherface SO MUCH. 

 

@Utah, yeah, I think I do, though I am not totally happy with it. I keep reminding myself of that Heminway quote "The first draft of anything is shit."

 

Alright, FINE! I'll post. Give me a little bit to get it ready. I'll post the first 5000 words or so. 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 7, 2012 - 5:55am

"Alright, FINE! I'll post."

I won't read it.

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 6:04am

I won't read it."

You are such a little liar! 

Let me give you the chain of events:

 

Me: You are such a little liar!

You: No, I won't. I am woman hear me roar.

Me: K, fine! 

Later that day.....

I post. 

You hold off for a few minutes, then read it. However, you don't comment on it, or give any reviews for the sake of keeping up appearances. 

 

3 months later

You make an offhand comment about the story, I catch you! You blow it off "Yeah, I fucking read it"

 

6 months later

Danny catches the clap in the mens room of a Dennys outside Seattle. 

 

The end. 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters May 7, 2012 - 6:06am

Honestly, I haven't reviewed since...maybe since you started this thread.  I hate being told to do something.  But really, I know I'm being neglectful.  I'll try to get back in the game later this week. 

But it won't be with some 5000 word monster about a zombie civil war or whatever. 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 6:07am

a zombie civil war or whatever."

Swing and a miss. 

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 7, 2012 - 6:09am

Cthulu vs the Union army?

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 6:10am

Cthulu verses the Evil Dead. 

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 7, 2012 - 6:12am

Even better!  Is Ash caught in the middle?  A 'Cthulu/Evil Dead ass-sandwich?

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 6:13am

No, but Mothra eats a PB & J. Then he has to take a dump. It's a real page turner! 

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 7, 2012 - 6:14am

Why have you not posted this already?!

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 6:20am

LOL, I'll get right on it. At work. 

 

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry May 7, 2012 - 6:23am

Don't get yourself in a tizzy.  I'm also at work and I have a 3k word deadline to meet after work (actually, it was a yesterday deadline, so I'm going to run into a solid wall of Fritz Wolfe disapproval later), so I probably won't have time to look at it today.  But soon.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. May 7, 2012 - 9:21am

Hiking and biking has fucked up my review schedule.   I know it's making you all sad to not be yelled at by me, so I'll try harder to tell you not to 'smile'.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 10:12am

Update, below are submissions that need reviews! 

 

TEAM SLAYER: Bill & Courtney v Meredith & Rachel -- FINAL

By: Bill Tucker
In: Realism, Short Story 0 reviews
A young man, a real-estate mogul, and an alcoholic father. 2,495 words.

Lights

By: Meredith103
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
2 new
TEAM SLAYER: Rach & Meredith vs. Bill & Courtney FINAL 2500 words, about a young runaway

Good Girls Don't (opening 5k) Re-entry

By: Typewriter Demigod
In: Novel Excerpt, Surprise Me 0 reviews
Love, honour and violence in high school. 6.5k words.

All the Angels

By: Dale
In: Noir, Novella 1 reviews
1 new
A hardboiled novella set in 1940s L.A., following a bent PI, working as a bagman for Mickey Cohen. He's approached by a German immigrant on the run who needs his help to hide from the Feds.

 

7 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Last Section

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
1 new
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is constantly enthralled by the power of pretty girls. 7,200 words (the last 5 snipits).

 

Prologue

By: jdudley
In: Fantasy, Novel Excerpt 2 reviews
2 new
Overlong prologue for a potential Fantasy/Adventure novel

 

Hotrods and Zombies

By: cdregan
In: Sci-fi, Short Story 2 reviews
3 new
A sport for the post-apocalypse. 2300 words.

 

Team Slayer: Meredith & Rach V. Courtney & Bill- Rough

By: rach122
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
3 new
2500 Words-"My Pretty Girl"-A woman finds herself in a familiar place and is overcome with memories.

 

Upright Citizens: Section 2

By: Nick Wilczynski
In: Novel Excerpt, Transgressive 2 reviews
1 new
The second section of my novel. Also a little more than 5,000 words. Please read Section 1 first.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 7, 2012 - 12:20pm

I'm high class like that, don't try and change me. 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 8, 2012 - 3:51am

Update! 

AM SLAYER: Bill & Courtney v Meredith & Rachel -- FINAL

By: Bill Tucker
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
1 new
A young man, a real-estate mogul, and an alcoholic father. 2,495 words.

Lights

By: Meredith103
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
4 new
TEAM SLAYER: Rach & Meredith vs. Bill & Courtney FINAL 2500 words, about a young runaway

Good Girls Don't (opening 5k) Re-entry

By: Typewriter Demigod
In: Novel Excerpt, Surprise Me 0 reviews
Love, honour and violence in high school. 6.5k words.

All the Angels

By: Dale
In: Noir, Novella 1 reviews
2 new
A hardboiled novella set in 1940s L.A., following a bent PI, working as a bagman for Mickey Cohen. He's approached by a German immigrant on the run who needs his help to hide from the Feds.

17 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Last Section

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
1 new
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is constantly enthralled by the power of pretty girls. 7,200 words (the last 5 snipits).

 

Prologue

By: jdudley
In: Fantasy, Novel Excerpt 2 reviews
2 new
Overlong prologue for a potential Fantasy/Adventure novel


Hotrods and Zombies

By: cdregan
In: Sci-fi, Short Story 2 reviews
3 new
A sport for the post-apocalypse. 2300 words.

 

Team Slayer: Meredith & Rach V. Courtney & Bill- Rough

By: rach122
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
3 new
2500 Words-"My Pretty Girl"-A woman finds herself in a familiar place and is overcome with memories.

 

Upright Citizens: Section 2

By: Nick Wilczynski
In: Novel Excerpt, Transgressive 2 reviews
1 new
The second section of my novel. Also a little more than 5,000 words. Please read Section 1 first.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 8, 2012 - 7:05am

I posted my thing. 

 

 

Untitled something or other Part 1 *Rough draft*

By: Matt Attack
In: Literary, Novel Excerpt 0 reviews
Set towards the end of the Civil War. Give me your thoughts. I am 100 pages deep, but stopped at about 24 with this. I plan to finish it. This is a rough, and the book is not complete. 6000 words

 

Side note: I really hate writing synopsis for the same reason I hate writing query letters. 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 9, 2012 - 3:06am

Update! Side note, Thank you Jeff for the review on mine! You're the man sir!~ 

 

Perfect Assassin chapter 1 Protestors

By: Dwayne
In: Novel Excerpt, Sci-fi 0 reviews
How does this work as a intro to an alternative history book? 2369 words

Untitled something or other Part 1 *Rough draft*

By: Matt Attack
In: Literary, Novel Excerpt 1 reviews
Set towards the end of the Civil War. Give me your thoughts. I am 100 pages deep, but stopped at about 24 with this. I plan to finish it. This is a rough, and the book is not complete. 6000 words

TEAM SLAYER: Bill & Courtney v Meredith & Rachel -- FINAL

By: Bill Tucker
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
A young man, a real-estate mogul, and an alcoholic father. 2,495 words.

Lights

By: Meredith103
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
4 new
TEAM SLAYER: Rach & Meredith vs. Bill & Courtney FINAL 2500 words, about a young runaway

Good Girls Don't (opening 5k) Re-entry

By: Typewriter Demigod
In: Novel Excerpt, Surprise Me 0 reviews
Love, honour and violence in high school. 6.5k words.

All the Angels

By: Dale
In: Noir, Novella 1 reviews
A hardboiled novella set in 1940s L.A., following a bent PI, working as a bagman for Mickey Cohen. He's approached by a German immigrant on the run who needs his help to hide from the Feds.

 

17 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Last Section

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
1 new
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is constantly enthralled by the power of pretty girls. 7,200 words (the last 5 snipits).

 

Prologue

By: jdudley
In: Fantasy, Novel Excerpt 2 reviews
2 new
Overlong prologue for a potential Fantasy/Adventure novel


Hotrods and Zombies

By: cdregan
In: Sci-fi, Short Story 2 reviews
3 new
A sport for the post-apocalypse. 2300 words.


Team Slayer: Meredith & Rach V. Courtney & Bill- Rough

By: rach122
In: Realism, Short Story 1 reviews
3 new
2500 Words-"My Pretty Girl"-A woman finds herself in a familiar place and is overcome with memories.


Upright Citizens: Section 2

By: Nick Wilczynski
In: Novel Excerpt, Transgressive 2 reviews
1 new
The second section of my novel. Also a little more than 5,000 words. Please read Section 1 first.

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce May 9, 2012 - 6:50am

myuu @ one week later, no reviews

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner May 9, 2012 - 11:21am

Typie, I'll try to get to it Sunday, it's the only free day I have coming up. Take a look at mine if you get a chance!

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks May 9, 2012 - 12:13pm

I feel bad for neglecting the Workshop, but I've actually been caught up in my own writing. Weird, right?

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce May 9, 2012 - 12:59pm

ofc matty.

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. May 9, 2012 - 7:14pm

At first I was like meh, I'm not so sure re-upping my workshop membership right now is a good idea and then I remembered there are still more achievements I need. Need!