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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 17, 2012 - 1:36pm

I'd really like more reviews on the novel excerpt, but I'd feel bad about trying to plug it when I wasn't able to sit down and finish a review of my own all damn weekend.

But I believe I should have a few hours here right now, and the next order of business is to get reviews done.

And now that I've made this post I am accountable. I hope.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 17, 2012 - 2:05pm

Send us votes Nick!!!! There are like 4 or 5 thunderdome polls sitting with hardly any votes....

 

Also, I saw this today and I was like, NICK! 

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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 17, 2012 - 2:48pm

lmfao.

That cheating bitch.

See, that's why they complain about gun control in America. In Russia people have assault rifles. We won the Cold War for what? So our civilians can be outgunned by their Russian counterparts?

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 17, 2012 - 2:51pm

Oh yeah, maybe she was cheating, never thought of it like that...I just figured it was random Russian violence. 

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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 17, 2012 - 2:58pm

it would be a good story prompt. But if it were just a caption contest I would submit "That cheating bitch!"

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 17, 2012 - 3:32pm

it would be a good story prompt."

 

I was thinking the same thing. 

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Michael Harrison from Nashville is reading Sliver by Ira Levin April 17, 2012 - 5:43pm

I'd appreciate a few more reviews for my submission 'Acedia'. I've gotten four so far and learned quite a bit from them. I'm new here and not sure what the Thuderdome stuff is all about so I haven't reviewed any of those yet. Thank you in advance and if I haven't reviewed you yet, yell and I will.

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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 17, 2012 - 5:52pm

You can just review thunderdome stories like normal stories, but if you feel especially invested in one story's success over the other you can vote in a poll in the forums.

I'm finishing off a review right now, but I'll check yours out next.

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aliensoul77 from a cold distant star is reading the writing on the wall. April 17, 2012 - 11:46pm

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 18, 2012 - 4:12am

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 18, 2012 - 1:14pm

The following submissions only have one vote. Help em out! Also drop by the Thunderdome polls, we need votes! 

 

Beyond Thunderdome! REMATCH! Courtney v. Matt Attack

Beyond Thunderdome! POLL- Bill v. Grigori

Beyond Thunderdome! POLL- Courtney v. Grigori

 

And make sure to check out the WAR submissions and vote! 

 

 

17 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Section 2

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 1 reviews
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is

 

eyond Thunderdome Grigori vs. Bill - Final

By: Grigori Black
In: Flash Fiction, Surprise Me 1 reviews
An unexpected turn of events. Luck follows Lisa where ever she goes, but today it seems as if Life has plans of its own. Has her Luck finally run its course?

 

Upright Citizens: Section 2

By: Nick Wilczynski (If you don't review this one, he will break you.) 
In: Novel Excerpt, Transgressive 1 reviews
1 new
The second section of my novel. Also a little more than 5,000 words. Please read Section 1 first.

 

The following only have 2! 

 

Beyond Thunderdome: Grigori vs. Courtney - Final

By: Grigori Black
In: Flash Fiction, Noir 2 reviews
Not your ordinary Barfight. Michael walks into a bad situation.

 

Society

By: JRNutt
In: Novel Excerpt, Realism 2 reviews
3 new
A group of people, living their lives.

 

Roughhouse: Team Slayer: Covewriter

By: Covewriter
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
Bracchos and I wrote this in a duo-competitioin with the prompt of a rainy night in a city. A break-in occurs on Christmas Eve. Turns out to be someone everyone knows, who isn't welcome, or is she?

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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 18, 2012 - 4:03pm

I've been voting, and I've been reviewing.

But you live a little too close to be worried about me breaking other people. I'm not going to try to track down Dakota, for all I know he's hopping rails in Kansas. Laurance is also too far a drive and I'll never make it to the West Coast.

But Richmond Virginia?

If he dies, he dies.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 18, 2012 - 4:10pm

LOL, in fairness, I am in Baltimore for another month, then Richmond. I thought you would appreciate that reference though. 

 

Also, this. I should seriously start a "Meanwhile in Russia" flash thread. LOL

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 6:59am

Daily update! The following have no reviews or only one or two. Help em out! 

Satisfaction Crumbles

By: voodoo_em
In: Flash Fiction, Literary 0 reviews
Written for "Flash Me - April thread" Quick read 465 words

Aren't You Danny Mann?

By: bjlangley
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
An 8000 word story about identity and celebrity culture. If you work as a look-alike, what happens when the person you look-alike become public enemy number one?

Upright Citizens: Section 2

By: Nick Wilczynski
In: Novel Excerpt, Transgressive 1 reviews
The second section of my novel. Also a little more than 5,000 words. Please read Section 1 first.

 

Beyond Thunderdome Grigori vs. Bill - Final (this has been sitting for quite some time with nothing) 

By: Grigori Black
In: Flash Fiction, Surprise Me 1 reviews
An unexpected turn of events. Luck follows Lisa where ever she goes, but today it seems as if Life has plans of its own. Has her Luck finally run its course?

 

17 Brief Conversations with Pretty Girls in a Coffee Shop - Section 2

By: Deets999
In: Literary, Short Story 2 reviews
1 new
17 non-linear funny, little conversations loosely connected through the voice of a male narrator who is constantly enthralled by the power of pretty girls. 8,200 words (just the second 6 snipits)..

 

Society

By: JRNutt
In: Novel Excerpt, Realism 2 reviews
3 new
A group of people, living their lives.

 

Remember to vote in WAR and the Thunderdome threads (links above) 

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 9:34am

Matt, you rock.  I love these updates.  I name thee: The Official Lit Reactor Workshop Pimp!

(The exclamation point is not part of your new title.  That was just a gift from me.)

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 9:36am

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 9:39am

Thanks dude, just trying to help out. Pimpin damn sure ain't easy. LOL

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 9:41am

Also, I humbly accept your generous gift of exclamation points. lol

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry April 19, 2012 - 9:50am

That might be the only exclamation point you ever see Bryan use.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 10:08am

I find that I exclamation point a lot more often in forum/e-mail messages.  I don't approve of this behavior.  But that was a special one, placed entirely with forethought and intent, just for Matt.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 10:13am

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RoganStanton from Kentucky is reading Damned by Chuck Palahniuk April 19, 2012 - 12:18pm

Hello everyone! I'm new here as my profile picture on the left says. I'm looking forward to reading and reviewing stories on here and being a part of the writing community.

I will go ahead and whore my story out now.

Title: Subject 904: Episodes
Word Count: 43,505
Genre/Style: Horror/Adventure/Psychological
Notes: This is Part 1 of the Subject 904 series that I'm writing. It's a rough draft and I'm looking for any feedback or critical response on how I can make this story better and anything that can help me to improve my writing for future stories.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 12:29pm

43,505"

Damn, now that's a tall order, but I think one or two of us are game, I might be able to do it. It'll take me a while though

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 12:30pm

@RoganStanton Don't just introduce yourself here, there's a whole category for that! You can get lots of personal attention that way. Also, that's a hefty piece of work, so you might have trouble getting a lot of reviews. Try to keep it under 10k in the future for our sanity's sake. Most submissions are around 2,500-5k words, to be honest. No one likes to see submissions go unreviewed, but it takes a lot of dedication to review something that long. I'll try to get started on it tonight, but it'll probably take a while to get a full review done.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 12:32pm

Matt, would you want to try splitting it up into two sections? That way we could (hopefully) get reviews in sooner and take some of the pressure off of us. You could do the first half, I could take the second half, and review them as separate entities. I'm not sure how well it would work, but we could even get a third or fourth person and break it down to 10k words apiece.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 12:33pm

I'd be down splitting it.....like do an LBL, pass it off....they do an LBL....it would just look disjointed is all...

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 12:35pm

Two sections?  That story should be split into 10 sections.  

Any story with more than 5k words is going to get skipped by most people if they don't feel like they owe you a review because you did a good critique for them.

I think of it like this: You can submit as many words as you've critiqued.  

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 12:46pm

@Court   Why don't we see how many people we can get on board with this, then split it evenly with everyone involved. It'll have to be individual reviews though so we get points. 

@RoganStanton  Most of us split stuff like this. The rule is around 5000 words, so, Nick for instance has his novel up for review and is submitting in sections. You didn't know so it is cool! Also, start an intro thread! 

 

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 12:43pm

I like the idea of passing the LBL along. We'd just have to mark where each person left off.

Any takers? We need some serious help on this.

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RoganStanton from Kentucky is reading Damned by Chuck Palahniuk April 19, 2012 - 12:46pm

Oops! Sorry about that. I'll keep it around 5k per submission in the future.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 12:51pm

No worries. It's an easy mistake. The main problem with workshops is that we're all writers, so we're all trying to juggle submitting with reviewing. It's an unsolvable conundrum. If we focus on reviewing, we're wasting our $9 a month, but if we focus on writing, we're losing the chance to grow through critiquing.

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Nick Wilczynski from Greensboro, NC is reading A Dance with Dragons by George R.R. Martin April 19, 2012 - 12:52pm

I think it would be more a thing where you would break it up into individual word documents for the LBLs, I think the points distribution would be smoother and that it would be easier, but again, that's not going to work very well for overarching plot review since a lot of us who would pick it up midway would lack context.

But I'm interested in helping if we can find a reliable method for doing it.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 12:56pm

I would think the first person downloads it. Then does X amount of words. Uploads. The next person downloads that LBL, reads through it, starts where the other leaves off and thus the process repeats itself. 

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 12:58pm

EDIT: Refer to Matt's post above this for exactly what I said about the LBLs. Damn you, Matt.

I guess we could have the first person summarize their excerpt and send it to the second person, and so on? So the last person who gets it would have a summary for each part that was already reviewed and would understand the plot up until their point. It wouldn't be a great technique for grading characterization, though.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 12:58pm

It's cool, Rogan.  There's no rules for submitting, so there's no way to know what's appropriate when you first start.  The shorter the submission, the more reviews you'll get (and the more detailed they will be).  

From what I've seen, 1000 words can get you 10+ reviews, 2,500 gets around 6-9, 4,000 gets 4-6, and 5,000+ gets 2-4.

And, like I said, the more you've critiqued, the more likely it is that people will pay it back.

 

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 1:02pm

Damn you, Matt."

 

LOL

I would just upload once you've done your share of words,  then put a summary in the comments for the next reviewer and so on. That way each review gets points and the LBL still gets propagated. By the end, the last LBL uploaded should be complete with everyones notes. So each person downloads the previous person LBL. 

alright, so Nick, myself and Courtney. Anyone else? 

 

@Bryan, I am reviewing your current one now. 

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 1:27pm

I'm working on my review for Nick's second section right now, but I'm eager to have more people join in on reviewing Rogan's piece.

I think we should have some sort of welcome basket for newbies with all this sort of information, tips on how to review/what to submit, etc.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 1:35pm

We have all the tips scattered around in a dozen different threads, hiding in intro threads and workshop threads.  If only someone would put them all together... Someone pretty, maybe.  Someone brunette, possibly.  Female, most likely.  Anyone that posted just before this post fit that description who wants to create an essay?

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce April 19, 2012 - 1:45pm

yup will do!

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 1:52pm

...I'll get started on that now, Howie. The flattery was not necessary.

Typewriter's going to help us review, too.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 1:57pm

The flattery was not necessary.

Well, you say that now.  But you might have told me to fuck off, otherwise.  I know I would have.

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 2:17pm

The flattery was not necessary."

 

Bwhaha, but it was funny. 

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 2:24pm

Fuck you guys. You took advantage of my need to be needed, so I've now written 1400 words about how to use the site to your advantage. Why am I such a fucking girl? (If either of you have babies I demand pictures of them as payment. My biological clock is ticking again.)

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner April 19, 2012 - 2:28pm

I do not have babies, I do have nieces though...so yeah...where is said essay! Also you bumped the thread, so anyone too lazy to press the back button, several of us are trying to tackle a 45k submission. If you're in, let us know. 

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 2:27pm

I haven't finished it yet!

So far, Matt, Nick, Typewriter, and I are on board. We need at least two or three more people to do this.

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce April 19, 2012 - 2:31pm

three pictures of breaded cats and yotsuba a good substitute for babies?

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 2:37pm

Nearly good enough. Now I want to see pictures of kittens with casts on their widdle legs. GO.

1,600 words total and now I'm just doing some formatting. It's a word document; should I attach it here, you think?

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks April 19, 2012 - 2:38pm

Fuck. I wrote it like a letter and I just realized it. Should I depersonalize it and make it more of a tutorial or let it stand as a personal letter from me to [insert new user here]?

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Typewriter Demigod from London is reading "White Noise" by DeLilo, "Moby-Dick" by Hermann Mellivile and "Uylsses" by Joyce April 19, 2012 - 2:55pm

a letter. it feels more welcoming

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. April 19, 2012 - 2:56pm

I don't have any babies, but I think I could make some.  How many you want and what's your favorite color?