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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland January 11, 2013 - 9:42pm

I REMOVED THE LINK BECAUSE SOUND IS AWESOME!

Any workshop membors that aren't reading WAR but need a review. Please read these two storries. 1200 words a piece. Vote for your favorite. There is a tie in WAR and it can't end in a tie. I will review a story for you in return and hopefully many others will as well. We only need one reader so respond here if you want to do it. Please!!!

and Thank you.

Jonathan

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt January 11, 2013 - 9:38pm

Done. Got nothing for you to review, though. 

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland January 11, 2013 - 9:39pm

Awesome!!! No more reads needed!

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland January 23, 2013 - 7:22am

I have my war story Hybrid up in the workshop. Could use several reviews. I guess it's noir but kind of transgressive. Not too good at classifying generes. It is definitely crime fiction though. Thanks.

--Jonathan--

 

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Liam Meilleur from New Orleans is reading The Fall of Kings by Ellen Kushner & Delia Sherman January 26, 2013 - 7:36pm

Hey, gang.

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/perchance

This story is the final piece of my thesis. I only finished it a few minutes ago (after many drafts/sleepless nights)  It’s due on Monday afternoon. If anyone could take a crack at it before then, it would really appreciate it.

Perchance
Science Fiction
~5,400 words.
 

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Ahti Ahde from Helsinki, Finland is reading Horns by Joe Hill January 27, 2013 - 1:53pm

I have now finished the first drafts of a four piece short story set, which I will submit for query, mostly out of curiosity. So now ahead of me is a massive systematic rewriting of the four, but I need more feedback for this one:

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/reality-check-2400-words-first-draft

My writers agenda is maybe a bit demanding, and it's 2,400 words. I have very mixed feelings so please give me any directions at all, and if you have some feelings about my weak spots as a writer, feel free to be brutally honest with me!

Thank you!

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt February 3, 2013 - 12:36pm

My Teleport Us offering, "Big Bang, Inc." is posted in the teleport us thread, site, thing. Read it HERE

I'll be posting it up in the workshop in a bit, too. But I'd appreciate if anyone could read and rate it on the Teleport Us page! :)

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Jimothy Scott from Canada is reading The Anatomy of Story by John Truby February 12, 2013 - 12:15pm

Hi everyone,

I seem to have posted a submission at the wrong time, namely a bunch of other people submitted that day to and I fear mine may have been overlooked as it went down the page. It's called teachers pet. I have one review but am looking for roughly five or six. I'll gladly review something of yours in exchange.

Thanks

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Jimothy Scott from Canada is reading The Anatomy of Story by John Truby February 13, 2013 - 1:48pm
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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland February 15, 2013 - 6:52pm

Apples and Trees

Got my eye on a few markets to submit this one to. How close is it to ready? I really have no idea of telling these days. Any and all reviews will be greatly apprecieated. Thanks guys.

JR

 

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Linda from Sweden is reading Fearful Symmetries February 16, 2013 - 1:02pm

I have my intended 'Transport Us' story in the workshop right now. Would really appreciate some feedback before I submit it to the challenge. In case you need a carrot, it features old boobies and monsters.

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-sea-came

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rob.weber from Cincinnati, Ohio February 20, 2013 - 12:29pm

Hello All,

I am a newbie and I just posted my novel excerpt titled #revolution. The submission is roughly 7500 words, and I fear I may have made it a bit too long to garner a lot of reviews. I will definitely take that into account next time. If Anyone who is kind enough to read it and just give me a few of their thoughts on it I would greatly appreciate it. Given the length I am not expecting a thorough LBL (unless you feel compelled to do so).

Thanks,

Rob 

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dufrescm from Wisconsin is reading Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep February 22, 2013 - 5:45pm

I just shared my WAR2 story, Forbidden Fruit, in the workshop. Any feedback would be very welcome.

 

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/forbidden-fruit

 

Thanks!

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 1, 2013 - 6:46am

Hey there, everybody!  Thought I'd hop in here and point out real quick that the workshop is in pretty bad shape.  I've been looking through there and most of the first 15 or so posts have 1 or 2 reviews.  So I just wanted to encourage everybody to get back in there and give someone's work a good rodgering...er...constructive criticism.

I say all this with my head down, of course, because until a couple days ago it had been probably six months since I'd done any reviewing myself.  But in the end, the workshop is why I own a membership to the site, so it's just bad economics to not use the thing.  Plus, the process of reviewing other people's work more firmly ingrains for all of us the principles we wish to apply to our own writing.

There are more further down the list, but I just didn't want to spend all morning going through the list.  If you are the author of an under-reviewed story further down the list, get your ass into The Workshop Whoring Thread and whore your shit!

There are a bunch of stories that are lengthy.  My recommendation:  pm the authors of those stories and let them know that doing an LBL on a 5000 word story is asking a bit much, but that you'd be happy to LBL the first half of the story (becuase LBL problems tend to be habitual anyway, and you should be able to uncover plenty of bad habits in the first 2500 words) and give overview thoughts on the rest of it.  If the auther is not cool with that then feel free to move on, but let's at least try to get some movement on those big stories.

Anyway, here's a hand list of stories that need some love immediately:

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/billy-a-short-movie

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/skipping-stones

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/a-spring-death

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/revolution

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/upon-a-waking-man-the-mantel-of-self-persisted

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/spider-hold-working-title

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/shadows-talent-part-one

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-house-on-harker-street

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/how-fire-tastes

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/imaginary-friends-3952-words

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/bad-blood-horror-noir-4400-words

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/justice-0

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/rfid-the-interrogators

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/one-tunguska-story

 

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated March 1, 2013 - 3:30pm

Isn't this what happens every time there is a WAR?

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 1, 2013 - 3:54pm

WAR2 is winding down now.  It's no longer a good excuse, and probably hasn't been in a month or so.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland March 1, 2013 - 3:56pm

Yeah, but Teleport Us is my excuse for now. I have still been getting in the workshop. Atleast once or twice a week. But I plan on reading and reviewing as many T U stories as I can so I won't be in there as much until April.

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 1, 2013 - 10:15pm

I thought something like that might be the case.

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 4, 2013 - 9:52am

Whore-stories that need you to pay them for their services.  Or something like that.  There was some movement in the last few days, and that's good.  I'm only addressing stories on the first page of the Workshop list.  If you don't have enough reviews and your story is past the first page of the list, then get in here and

Whore your shit.

Anyway, this is my pimp-prattle.  The number is getting whittled down.  This list is the stories that have fewer than 3 reviews in the Workshop.  They need your help.  Some of these run long.  I have, in the past, spoken to the writers of lengthy stories and gotten permission to LBL (because that's my typical review method) only a portion of their story.  So that is an approach.  Another approach (probably-vain appeal to the Golden Rule here) is to realize that there's a very good chance you're going to want a 5,000 word story reviewed in the Workshop one of these days.  My first was a 5500 word monster.  There were like 10 reviews on it in about a week.  Ah, nostalgia.

Anyway, your list!:

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/billy-a-short-movie

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/skipping-stones

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/a-spring-death

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/upon-a-waking-man-the-mantel-of-self-persisted

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/spider-hold-working-title

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/shadows-talent-part-one

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-house-on-harker-street

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/imaginary-friends-3952-words

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/bad-blood-horror-noir-4400-words

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/how-far-love-goes

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/pawn

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-bundle-part-one

 

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mcvaughn from Shelbyville, Kentucky is reading Vinyl Destination from Adam Millard March 4, 2013 - 7:16pm

Hey everybody. I just joined the workshop, this is officially my first workshop I've been involved in. I'm looking forward to interacting with everybody. I hope to get some good feedback on my story and hopefully give some useful feedback to others.

Here is my story :

Daddy's Girl

1738 words

slipstream

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/daddys-girl

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dufrescm from Wisconsin is reading Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep March 8, 2013 - 9:14am

I'm still hoping for some more thoughts on Forbidden Fruit, if anyone's got the time and/or inclination. I'm not so much looking for an LBL, because I think I've got my heart set on turning it into a novel (eep!). I'm more looking for general strengths, weaknesses, questions, areas you'd like to see explored in more detail, etc.

 

Thanks :)

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big_old_dave from Watford, about 20 miles outside London, Uk March 9, 2013 - 5:49am

Hi Folks,

My latest offerings to the workshop has been up for the last week, Unfortunatly it does wander over the 5000 word mark, (you know me!) Not looking for a line by line just a general impression if I'm wasiting my time with this one!

Cheers!

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-right-words

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest March 9, 2013 - 7:48am

Dave: I'm in the middle of a review for you, bud. I'll have it up by tomorrow. I always LBL. Force of habit, I guess. lol... Gots a busy day today, though, but will work on it when I get home tonight.

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest March 9, 2013 - 7:51am

I will be getting back into the workshop this coming week. I'm going to review Dave's first since he hasn't received one yet and I'm in the middle of it, but for everyone else I will get one up for you in the coming week.

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big_old_dave from Watford, about 20 miles outside London, Uk March 9, 2013 - 10:27am

Thanks Moon!

. Hopfully it's not being too much of a pain in the back side!

I've done review today for pinky's promise, I'll get on to another one tomorrow as well.

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 9, 2013 - 1:15pm

Looks like my timing is good, then.  Does your promise save me the trouble of PMming you and promising you a foot rub in exchange for a review?

For the rest of you, I will whore my own shit for a moment.  Please check out "Wither" in the workshop and share your thoughts with me.  This was my first round story for WAR2.  It's taken me a long time to get around to putting the missing scenes in, but it's a bit longer than the contest submission.  I would love getting your thoughts.

Also, it would be especially awesome to get some female  perspective on this story. I

 

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 10, 2013 - 6:35am

I know it hasn't been up long enough for me to not look like a total slut if I whore my latest piece in the workshop, but hey, I can't help being a saucy little tart.

It's called Dusted Off: Poems From Before. I have to make every last little change needed, and send it off by noon on Friday, the 15th. So, if you want an easy read (only 600 words) and are willing to put at least marginal effort into a constructive review, then you'll be rewarded with my undying gratitude, and three of those sexy little point jobbies.

And if you think my undying gratitude is worth little, let me just say that I do things for those I'm grateful for, unspeakable, delicious things.

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest March 10, 2013 - 8:00am

Strange, are you referring to a delicious cake with hacksaw blades buried inside so I can make my great escape? I could've used one of those about 8 months ago. Nonetheless, I survived and I'm here to review. I'm in the middle of Dave's story now. But, once things slow done today ill be getting to more reviews. Look for something from me in the next day or so. 

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 10, 2013 - 8:31am

Damnit, Moon, you ruined the surprise!

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Tim Johnson from Rockville, MD is reading Notes From a Necrophobe by T.C. Armstrong March 11, 2013 - 4:26pm

Wow, Utah was cool enough to include my story in the bunch above...twice. It's my first submission to this workshop, and I'd really love to get another couple of reads. I'll post a revision later tonight, so if you help me out, I'd appreciate your checking the new version out.

I'm a good tipper, and I promise to hit your latest back with a critique. Thanks!

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-house-on-harker-street

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 14, 2013 - 12:39pm

Ok, I have less than a day to make any final changes to the three selections from my five-poem workshop submission entitled, Dusted Off: Poems From Before.

Seeing as I only have 3 reviews for a submission that has only 600 words, and others have up to and including 9 reviews for submissions of nearly 5,000 words, there's little to no excuse for not taking the miniscule time to look the poems over and at least give overall observations, at most do an lbl like some have already, and point out more specific areas which need improvement.

I've got to send my three poems in by noon (EST) tomorrow, 3-15-13, so any reviews that make it in before 11a.m. will get three points (so long as it isn't a lame ass couple sentences just trolling for points) and anything after 11a.m. will get my undying rage as you failed to follow directions.

Actually, that's not entirely true. I'll still probably be grateful and shit, but you'll have assisted me to a much less degree.

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 14, 2013 - 12:48pm

Seriously.  It's not a difficult review.  Take you maybe 20 minutes.  That's not too bad. 

Photon, I'd do one for you, but, you know, I already did...

Don't be afraid of poetry, folks. 

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 14, 2013 - 12:53pm

I know you would, Utah, and it's that sort of devotion that allows me to overlook your bulldog of a face.

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Utah from Fort Worth, TX is reading Lonesome Dove by Larry McMurtry March 14, 2013 - 12:54pm

That's unkind.  I'm going to go masturbate a gusher in you gym locker.

 

 

 

 

Seriously, it's going to be like Niagara Falls.

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 14, 2013 - 1:20pm

God damn, man, that was so vile a comment that it made me feel dirty enough to have to go do the dishes before I could bring myself to respond...

I still have nothing. I'd say your words made my jaw drop but I don't ever want my mouth open when you're around.

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 15, 2013 - 7:39am

Ok, this is getting quite disconcerting that I spent 45 goddam dollars for 6 months of access to a workshop where people can't be bothered to read 600 words.

There is less than half an hour till I need to start finalizing my submission for a contest that needs to be sent out at noon. In that less than half an hour, you can EASILY read my five poems - that take up 600 words - and post a well-thought-out review. You could even fashion an lbl if you had enough specifics to not want to merely write them into the review itself.

C'mon, people, my faith in humanity is always low, but do you really want to be the one (or one of seven billion) who pushes it even lower?

READ AND REVIEW PLEASE

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SRead from Colorado is reading Stories March 15, 2013 - 8:17am

I'd review it for you again, if I could SP.

I'm new to the shop, so I don't know if it is always this quiet, but it does seem a bit sluggish at the moment. I'm blaming daylight savings and giving it the benefit of the doubt.

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dufrescm from Wisconsin is reading Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep March 15, 2013 - 8:28am

Photon, I'd love to help you out, but I'm no good at poetry :(

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Hector Acosta from Dallas is reading Fletch March 15, 2013 - 8:47am

Hey everybody,

I know I haven't really been active in the workshop as of late, but I been insanely busy with this semester of student teaching, as well as focusing any spare moment I have in working on a novel.

Not sure how many people saw it, but a while back I made a thread about an agent contacting me out of the blue based off a story of mine that he saw and liked (That story btw, was workshopped here, so IMMENSE thanks to everyone that commented on 'Doing the Job'). This agent asked me to submit the first fifty pages of a story I pitched to him when I felt they were ready.

And I think they're almost ready. Which is where you come in.

I really don't want to break the story up into smaller chapters over at the workshop, as one thing I'm trying to find out is if the pacing works. So if there's anyone that is willing to do me the large favor of agreeing to read it over, that would be awesome.

It doesn't have to be a line by line edit. Even overall thougths, or the place where you gave up on the story would be of great help.

And of course, if you have a longer piece of work that you would like me to critique, I'd be more than happy to repay the favor.

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SRead from Colorado is reading Stories March 15, 2013 - 9:00am

Hi Hector,

I'd be happy to read for you. I prefer reading one longer sub to hunting down individual chapters, anyway.

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dufrescm from Wisconsin is reading Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep March 19, 2013 - 2:21pm

I've decided that I'm only going to review the longer workshop submissions, since they have an unfair disadvantage and the flash pieces tend to get more than enough reviews anyway.

So, if you've got a story in the workshop that is longer than 2,500 words, and you'd like a thorough critique with a very detailed LBL (and you don't mind waiting a few days while I work on it), msg me a link to your workshop submission and I'll get to work on it!  

 

Cheers!

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland March 30, 2013 - 12:27pm

Just posted my WarII story Bloodhound in the workshop. Would love to get a few reviews so I can get this one tidied up to send out. Thanks

--JR--

 

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dufrescm from Wisconsin is reading Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep March 30, 2013 - 1:55pm

JR, I can't read that again. It makes me cry too damn much. lol

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland March 30, 2013 - 2:19pm

Well, I guess if it makes people upset then maybe it's pretty close to being done. And I'm sorry for upsetting people. I need to rework the ending. I think it needs to take George longer to do what he does in light of what he walked in to.

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sean of the dead from Madisonville, KY is reading Peckerwood, by Jed Ayres March 30, 2013 - 2:37pm

And I'm sorry for upsetting people.

STOP APOLOGIZING! don't be sorry for upsetting people. not now, not ever.

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest March 30, 2013 - 2:51pm

STOP APOLOGIZING! don't be sorry for upsetting people. not now, not ever

- that sound just like something Avery would say. 

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland March 30, 2013 - 2:52pm

Ha, Okay Sean, I'll try.

I had sent a rough draft of this story to a friend to read. Then a couple days later he sent me pictures of examples of when this happened in real life, and I almost threw up when I looked at the pictures and it made me nauseated and I felt awful. Writing the story didn't do that to me. I guess maybe I was too close to it. But then when I thought about my story making people feel like that, at first I didn't like that, because it was an awful feeling, so I did feel bad and sorry for doing that to people. But after thinking about it for a while, the whole idea about writing is to evoke emotional responses, no matter what response that is, so if  I was able to do that, then the story must be affective, and I'm okay with that.

So I'm sorry for appologizing. lol I hope you all vomit and cry everytime you read my stories.

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Strange Photon from Fort Wayne, IN is reading Laurie Anderson lyrics March 30, 2013 - 2:55pm

Amen to that!!!

Like I said in Dwayne's thread, "Worst Writing Advice", I was told once not to write something because it would upset too many people. I'm sure you know how much I listened to that - yep, not one fucking bit. You know what? I won an award for that poem I was told was too upsetting. So, when you feel that pang of guilt, ignore it and go for the jugular, Jon!

Now I'll have to go read this upsetting piece of yours. 

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Dino Parenti from Los Angeles is reading Everything He Gets His Hands On March 30, 2013 - 3:34pm

@JR: Man, I'm sorry that's the response you got from a piece, but your job as a writer isn't to worry about who may or may not get offended or hurt by anything you write short of a directly addressed insult. There are too many humans on this planet with too many proclivities and issues to waste any time worrying about causing offense.

@Photon: Man, that's some shitty advice you got. Nothing's worth writing if it doesn't offend at least 1/3 of its readers, while inspiring the other 2/3. I'm glad you won an award.

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SRead from Colorado is reading Stories March 30, 2013 - 3:38pm

I just finished posting my review of it. Did it make me feel awful? YEP. But that's exactly what I'm looking for, so thank you. (This is where you say "you're welcome" not "I'm sorry".)