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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt November 23, 2012 - 9:02pm

The Black Spot is up in the workshop for anyone who had any suggestions while reading it during round 1 of WAR. Trying to get it revised so I can start submitting it to places. You can read it HERE

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Matt Attack from Richmond, Va. is reading As I Lay Dying, William Faulkner December 2, 2012 - 5:47am

Whore you whores. 

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 7, 2012 - 12:23am

My first attempt a Noir is up in the workshop. It's called Face Full of Asphalt, and it's only 600 words. If anyone who's a seasoned Noir writer can review it, even better. 

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JEFFREY GRANT BARR from Central OR is reading Nothing but fucking Shakespeare, for the rest of my life December 7, 2012 - 1:25am

Hey Sound, I just fucked a new hole into your story  in the workshop. Joke's on you, I can't write noir for shit! So, if you want to box, you can review my super-delightful story Ruby Gets a New Start in the workshop. Do it, pussy.

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 9, 2012 - 5:13pm

Jeff, I'll take on your story next. Had a few others I had commited to. I ain't no pussy. 

Also, just posted yet another story that I had previously submitted when I first joined the site. Been tweaking it so much over the years that I can't see what's wrong with it anymore. Seems no one wants to publish it so I'm putting it up for you fine people to help me out. You can find it here: Dinner At The Colonial Kitchen

Thanks!

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fport from Canada is reading The World Until Yesterday - Jared Diamond December 30, 2012 - 1:58pm

So WAR takes precedence eh? Ok. I'd just like to say that I have a poor submission - my first available for the beating and pummeling I probably so roundly deserve for starting the 'You People' thread and not agreeing that writing a submission first was the proper way to do things. This will be something you can sink your teeth into and yank me into the real world of cutting prose and unchained muses so that I may rise up and fly about with you in the upper realms of litreactordom.

It's called, "A Funny thing happened..." and it's SciFi. That is only a working title.

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/a-funny-thing-happened

 

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 13, 2012 - 1:19pm

The first part of a three part novella (novelette?) is up in the workshop.  Looking for general help on this one, but especially for people who will stick through the full 13,000 words of the story.  This first part is 4,100 words.  

It's called Saving Grace (please help me come up with a better title, too).  

It'll make a great distraction while you're waiting for your next WAR2 prompts.

Love you all.

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Renfield from Hell is reading 20th Century Ghosts December 18, 2012 - 7:27pm

I've got a couple 3 war stories up in the workshop right now if anyone wants to take a look. They need work, I know it, but I'm never gonna get around to redrafting until I get some perspective on them. So cheers if you read them.

 

@Howie Saving Grace was a great movie. Love that Craig Ferguson. Why don't you email me the whole story and I'll take a look at it? Where do shop around 13k stories?

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 19, 2012 - 6:49am

The second part of Saving Grace is up.  I got GREAT reviews and critiques on the first part, I'm hoping for more of the same for the second.  

Thank you all for the help.  This part is longer and slower moving.  I also don't know how consistant the voice is, but I hope it's pretty good.  

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 19, 2012 - 9:22pm

Latest story, 3 Steps to Finding Jesus, is up in the workshop. It's 1000 words long so take a look and review for a quick 3 points! 

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland December 19, 2012 - 9:36pm

Gosh you people keep writing so damn fast and submitting to the workshop. I want to read them all, I really do. Between work and holiday stuff and Reading and Writing for War, I have not been able to read alot of the stories I said I would, so to everyone I told I would give them a review soon I appologize and still have every intention on doing so the first chance that I get!!! In the meantime, slow the hell down so I can catch the fuck up.

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest December 19, 2012 - 10:28pm

Working on reviews for all you fuckers. Got a couple done tonight. Have a bunch more tomorrow. I guess I'll whore out my 666 word count story Tanas 6:66.

Still don't know how you guys get the links for your stories in the posts.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 19, 2012 - 10:39pm

I just PM Averydoll and ask her to do it for me.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 19, 2012 - 11:12pm

Hey guys! I've got three short poems (just 21, 27, and 28 lines!) in the Workshop right now. They're easy to review, so give me your thoughts. I've got a few reviews that told me that my message is lost in translation -- not all of them are condemnations of men (in fact, only the last one is meant to be angry), so help me fix that.

 

@Ryan Go to your workshop submission's page, copy the link from your address bar, and type out what you want your post to say; then, highlight what you want to link to the submission (like "three short poems" above) and click the world with a chain or whatever that picture is next to the quote thing, and paste in the link. Voila! You have your link.

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 20, 2012 - 9:07am

Court, you are blowing me away with your awesome lbls.   Thank you so much.

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Lawrence from Dallas, Texas is reading Mr. Mercedes - Stephen King December 20, 2012 - 12:55pm

I posted a revised version of my horror short story (2,000 words), The Gate yesterday.

It's a lovecraftian story and I think its very close to finished. I can't hide behind the old, "well, if it's not good, its my first draft." cliche. I would love to hear what anybody thinks. It should still be very readable to someone who isn't well versed in Lovecraft.

Thanks guys!

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 20, 2012 - 2:03pm

Aww, Howie, you know how to flatter a woman. <3

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 22, 2012 - 9:03am

In case anyone wants all three parts for a Christmas vacation/new years project, I put up the 3rd part of my long story "Saving Grace".

I appreciate all the great advice and critiques I've gotten so far.  Part 1 has enough critiques, but if you read it to get to the second part, leave a rating for the first part and I'll give points for it.  I know it's a long story and it's hard to sit through a long story, so even simple comments on the parts will get points.

As I've mentioned before, this is a very important story for me, so everyone who reads it (even if you don't do a LbL or have too much to say other than you liked/dislike parts) gets put on Santa's 'nice' list.

Except Stacy.  Santa said there's nothing he can do about your 'naughty' status.  You're just a naughty girl.

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 22, 2012 - 9:07am

Another short one up in the workshop for me, The Symmetry of Things. It's around 900 words. Let me know what you think! 

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. December 22, 2012 - 9:27am

'Tis the season for flash fiction critiques.  :)

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Mess_Jess from Sydney, Australia, living in Toronto, Canada is reading Perfect by Rachael Joyce December 22, 2012 - 9:35am

I really need to get back to workshopping and critiques now we've got a little bit of a WAR reprieve. 

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 22, 2012 - 9:59am

'Tis the season for flash fiction critiques.  :)

It is. I blame Carly. 

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest December 22, 2012 - 10:10am

 

"Tis the season to be merry."

"That's my name.'

"No shit"

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Dino Parenti from Los Angeles is reading Everything He Gets His Hands On December 23, 2012 - 8:58am

@bryanhowie: I'll check out at least your part 2 today. Look forward to it. 

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 23, 2012 - 11:39pm

Another one, this one not a flash fiction piece. It's a second draft of my Thunderdome Battle story against Utah. Finally got around to editing it and added about six hundred words to it (for a total of 2900 words). Looking to get this ready to submit so any help would be appreciated. You can read "Little Gods", HERE

It was a lot of fun writing. 

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Dino Parenti from Los Angeles is reading Everything He Gets His Hands On December 27, 2012 - 12:35pm

If anyone has any time, or has finished with their Round 3 voting and would like a little good karma (along with  a little reciprocity), run on over to the workshop and check out my Round 2 losing story called "Mama's Little Lookout" which I've just posted. It could use some TLC and a very discerning eye. Okay, maybe it needs some CPR as well. Thanks all!

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest December 27, 2012 - 1:06pm

Got you Dino. I remember reading it and voting for it. 

Wil be reviewing Howie's story, too.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 27, 2012 - 1:33pm

I'm slowly working my way through everything on the front page that I haven't reviewed, so anything after Dino's story will have to wait.

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Lawrence from Dallas, Texas is reading Mr. Mercedes - Stephen King December 28, 2012 - 10:58am

Big thanks to Frank who took the time to review my story. I really appreciate all the help. You guys are the best.

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt December 28, 2012 - 11:04am

Just read Bryan's story. Will read Broken Hearts, Ohio and Mama's Little Lookout probably tonight.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland December 28, 2012 - 11:11am

I'm done with reading War stories, and i don't have many plans this weekend besides seeing Django. So I will finally be able to do alot of the reviews I promised but have had to push back. I also could use a couple more on Waiting for Christmas. I would like a few reviews from woman because It was my first attempt at a teenage girl p.o.v. so I would like to know how I did from a female's perspective. I will return any reviews. Thanks, Jonathan

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/waiting-for-christmas

 

 

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fport from Canada is reading The World Until Yesterday - Jared Diamond December 30, 2012 - 1:55pm

Gosh, after a wrong turn approximately as bad as my first workshop piece - I just showed up to find some more readers for my ongoing writing exercise, peoples with sharp fangs and medium to dangerous unclipped claws. I am applying as a practice dummy. I want to burn for spelling, grammar, pov, dialogue, lack of this or that and generally anything that I can work on or more importantly what I really really need to work on.

This is a snippet from my plot and theme that was never planned for in the  novel's outline/plotline, it is an aside to a couple of characters, one a main and the other an ancillary. The interaction, which is far deeper than this aside helps form one of the main characters.

 

SciFi, we're doing cutting edge technology, a little intrigue, corporate bashing, neuroscience and some other stuff. Come on, scifi, don't you want to be one the ones that set free another new voice out there. On that site http://iwl.me for writing style I sit somewhere between Cory Doctorow and HP Lovecraft or David Brin and Isaac Asimov. Depending on the paragraphs. But hey. 

 

 

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/funny-third-draft

 

Think of it as a contest about who gets to chasten the new guy and turn his life around.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 30, 2012 - 2:19pm

Yeah, I'm having trouble getting any reviews done because I'm busy as fuck. I won't have a subscription next month, but if you ask really nicely, I might review your shit between crying fits.

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 30, 2012 - 4:01pm

May I have your tears? I like tears in my coffee.

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fport from Canada is reading The World Until Yesterday - Jared Diamond December 30, 2012 - 4:04pm

Dwayne, what are you doing, I have something you can defenestrate!

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 30, 2012 - 4:05pm

I'm sorry that was rude of me. May I please have your tears?

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 30, 2012 - 4:06pm

@Port - Chilling, being evil.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 30, 2012 - 4:19pm

Dwayne, my tears taste awful.

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 30, 2012 - 4:31pm

Don't be so hard on yourself. They aren't child tears, but I like them.

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 30, 2012 - 9:23pm

Well, if you can handle semi-alcoholic, nicotine-stained, bitter tears... I'll try to find a way to bottle them.

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 30, 2012 - 11:14pm

Stop making excuses and bottle!

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Courtney from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooks December 31, 2012 - 12:35am

I haven't cried yet, goddamnit! I got all the shit formatted and coded for my website by the time you asked -- I didn't have a reason to cry!

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated December 31, 2012 - 7:41am

Look around, you'll find one.

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R.Moon from The City of Champions is reading The Last Thing He Wanted by Joan Didion; Story Structure Architect by Victoria Lynn Schimdt PH.D; Creating Characters by the editors of Writer's Digest January 3, 2013 - 5:20pm

Gots me flash piece that needs a few reviews if anyone's got time. There are also a bunch of other stories in the workshop that could use reviews.

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/tanas-at-666-revision

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Dino Parenti from Los Angeles is reading Everything He Gets His Hands On January 3, 2013 - 10:08pm

Just put up a short story called Short-Cutters on the workshop if anyone's interested in scooping up 3 points before next round's WAR prompts drop tomorrow. Or, if you're not part of WAR this year, please feel free to still rip it apart. Thanks in advance!

Btw, does anyone know how to attach the direct link to a workshop story to one of these threads as R.Moon has above?

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Cures and Remedies from Canada is reading Transubstantiate - Richard Thomas January 3, 2013 - 10:16pm

@Dino: To attach the direct link, highlight the name of your story in this thread and click on the icon to the right of the quotation marks, the one which looks like a globe with legs. A box will open and in the space for a URL, paste the link to your submission and click 'ok'. It will be highlighted red and then act as a direct link to your story.

You can also type out the URL, then use the 'globe' icon and paste the same url there. It'll then look exactly like R. Moon's link does, I think.

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Sound from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael Wehunt January 3, 2013 - 10:14pm

Dino, you copy the url from your story's page, and click the little world-link icon above the comment box next to the quotations. Paste the url in the pop-up window, and done. 

I've been slacking with the reviews. I'll get to them this weekend. 

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Dino Parenti from Los Angeles is reading Everything He Gets His Hands On January 3, 2013 - 10:36pm
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OtisTheBulldog from Somerville, MA is reading The Brief Wondrous Life of Oscar Wao by Junot Diaz January 5, 2013 - 10:12am

So, who wants some easy points? Below is a revision. Do a good review on that, and you'll earn your points. But wait - there's more!

Yes, more, folks!

Act now, and you can earn BONUS POINTS! Read my first draft (the link is in the revision) prior to reading the revision. Just enter some stars and a quick message in the first draft, something along the lines of "full review in the revision" and I can send some points your way for both. 

As long as you give me the quality criticisms we've come to know and love here at LitReactor, it's an easy, fun way to earn yourself a TwoFer.

Oh, but you must act fast. Supplies are limited.

(not really, but that's what we say in this business)

http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-barker-remix

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bryanhowie from FW, ID is reading East of Eden. Steinbeck is FUCKING AMAZING. January 7, 2013 - 5:46pm

Hemlock (previously "Saving Grace) is finished.  Well, at least the final version of the second draft is done.  I hope the whole thing is pretty much done.  It's 14,000 words and I don't expect you to slog through them all if it doesn't seem worthwhile.  

I need to know 1) is it done? and 2) where do I sell it?

Love you all.