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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters January 18, 2013 - 7:33pm
Thinspiration
10% (2 votes)
Camping Trip
0% (0 votes)
Marshall Jones
5% (1 vote)
Bitch
0% (0 votes)
Multi User Dungeon
10% (2 votes)
Going Under
0% (0 votes)
Painted Snails
20% (4 votes)
Trinity
0% (0 votes)
Knocking
5% (1 vote)
Waiting
5% (1 vote)
Enough
5% (1 vote)
Oiran Love
0% (0 votes)
Death's Door
30% (6 votes)
Church of the Palms
5% (1 vote)
Trophies
0% (0 votes)
Pilot – Part 2: Electric Boogaloo
5% (1 vote)
Total votes: 20

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jyh from VA is reading whatever he feels like January 18, 2013 - 9:43pm

I'm interested in whatever feedback people want to give me about Multi User Dungeon. If it just wasn't your thing and that's it, cool, don't send me a message. But if anyone wants to tell me whether or not it actually works (by whatever means) "as a story," I'd appreciate it. (Not trying to circumvent the workshop; just looking for general responses.)

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 18, 2013 - 10:45pm

Un-Edit

J.Y.: You hooked me with Dungeon, and I loved the language Ragamuffin used, and the innocuous nature of the screenname for someone so nefarious, but ultimately you lost me with the ending. The fact hat it was a joke broke the spell, as did the banter at the end. I can't say how it "should have" ended, but to me, that just wasn't it.

It was a hard call for me, that match, and I read each twice. I admire the risks you take, your use of language, and the creativity you bring to your work. I'll miss reading your stuff in WAR.

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Jonathan Riley from Memphis, Tennessee is reading Flashover by Gordon Highland January 18, 2013 - 10:19pm

Edits are trending. Right?

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 18, 2013 - 10:05pm

*fist bump*

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jyh from VA is reading whatever he feels like January 18, 2013 - 10:10pm

Thanks, and good luck to you both.

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jyh from VA is reading whatever he feels like January 18, 2013 - 10:11pm

... and I was not trying to hijack the thread, so if anybody else wants to tell me stuff, please PM.

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jyh from VA is reading whatever he feels like January 18, 2013 - 10:16pm

... but, I mean, you didn't have to delete all those glowing adorations, Emme.

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 18, 2013 - 10:47pm

Happy now? I am war-weary, and last night slipped and fell on the ice like an old lady. My hip hurts something awful, and I'm pretty sure my brain came loose.

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Renfield from Hell is reading 20th Century Ghosts January 19, 2013 - 4:49am

I liked mine the best, but I got my ass handed to me in a paper bag so what do I know. I liked the two crime stories too, they weren't my style but were pretty much exactly what you would want with a hard genre flash story. I also liked both the stories about the three girls, all sugar and spice and everything supercreepy. And obviously I enjoyed my competitor, who showed she was betterer, or something.

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 19, 2013 - 8:24am

Thanks, Renfield! Boogaloo gave me a great laugh when I needed one, so it's got my vote here.

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TomMartinArt from Amherst, MA January 19, 2013 - 9:33am

Waiting - a farcical romp through the ongoing guilt of a murderer.

For your consideration.

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 19, 2013 - 10:19pm

I know more than 12 people read the stories this bout.

 
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Gordon Highland from Kansas City is reading Secondhand Souls by Christopher Moore January 20, 2013 - 1:19pm

Sorry, didn't notice the thread until now. "Death's Door" was my favorite, and its competitor "Church of the Palms" a close second.

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Liana from Romania and Texas is reading Naked Lunch January 20, 2013 - 3:15pm

Thanks for the votes! Wohoo!

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 20, 2013 - 10:44pm

Rock on, Liana! 

Thank you for the Death's Door nods. I am most surprised and so delighted!

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voodoo_em from England is reading All the books by Ira Levin January 21, 2013 - 2:45am

I'm voting late here but it's okay cos I haven't cheated and looked who wrote for what yet.

I voted for Thinspiration.

I'm gonna go check out who wrote what :)

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Renfield from Hell is reading 20th Century Ghosts January 21, 2013 - 6:24am

I liked the polar interpretations of Kiera Knightly as the portrayal of a fictional character.

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lspieller from Los Angeles January 24, 2013 - 10:44pm

JY -- I agree with Emma. Your story had me hooked - it was so creative, and you had me genuinely spooked. That is, until the end. i wanted some sort of crazy shiz to happen to the last guy left in the chat room, so i was a little disappointed when it all turned out to be a hoax. I was also confused as to why no one could see the guy talking until it was talking to them if it really *was* just some other guy in the room. Still..really creative, and genuinely spooktastic.

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Liana from Romania and Texas is reading Naked Lunch January 25, 2013 - 1:06pm

@ JY, I agree with Lauren and Emma. I, too, felt disappointed that it was all just a prank. But I did like the story (I think I voted for it in BAS).

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jyh from VA is reading whatever he feels like January 25, 2013 - 2:22pm

I thought anti-climactic trick endings were where it's at.

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters January 25, 2013 - 2:41pm

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Emma C from Los Angeles is reading Black Spire by Delilah Dawson January 25, 2013 - 6:41pm

Thanks for the support on Door, y'all! Liana, Snails was lovely and a well-deserved win!