I'm interested in whatever feedback people want to give me about Multi User Dungeon. If it just wasn't your thing and that's it, cool, don't send me a message. But if anyone wants to tell me whether or not it actually works (by whatever means) "as a story," I'd appreciate it. (Not trying to circumvent the workshop; just looking for general responses.)
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J.Y.: You hooked me with Dungeon, and I loved the language Ragamuffin used, and the innocuous nature of the screenname for someone so nefarious, but ultimately you lost me with the ending. The fact hat it was a joke broke the spell, as did the banter at the end. I can't say how it "should have" ended, but to me, that just wasn't it.
It was a hard call for me, that match, and I read each twice. I admire the risks you take, your use of language, and the creativity you bring to your work. I'll miss reading your stuff in WAR.
I liked mine the best, but I got my ass handed to me in a paper bag so what do I know. I liked the two crime stories too, they weren't my style but were pretty much exactly what you would want with a hard genre flash story. I also liked both the stories about the three girls, all sugar and spice and everything supercreepy. And obviously I enjoyed my competitor, who showed she was betterer, or something.
JY -- I agree with Emma. Your story had me hooked - it was so creative, and you had me genuinely spooked. That is, until the end. i wanted some sort of crazy shiz to happen to the last guy left in the chat room, so i was a little disappointed when it all turned out to be a hoax. I was also confused as to why no one could see the guy talking until it was talking to them if it really *was* just some other guy in the room. Still..really creative, and genuinely spooktastic.
