What are your best ten first words for a story? Consider:
'Call me Ishmael.' (Moby Dick)
'It was the best of times. It was the worst of times.' (A Tale of Two Cities)
'The first ten words are more important than the next ten thousand,' is an adage that I think all writer's might make a fundamental tenet. Consider:
'She only stopped screaming when she died.' (Kane and Abel)
'There were two kinds of monster in Titian's life...' (The Druid)
First words ought to drive the reader forward, and the best ones, I think, create unspoken questions that the writer does not need to spell out. Why would a guy say 'Call me Ishmael?' What has he got to hide?
What could make a woman scream until she was dead?
Why two kinds of monster?
Your thoughts?
"No matter where you live in New York City, you always end up in Queens."
That's more than ten, sorry, but a quality opening nonetheless. I didn't even make it up, only took note when a pillot said it over the speaker during our descent to LaGuardia airport, regarding the cemeteries as far as the eye could see. Which spawned a story about a guy who's supposed to be dead finding himself living out some other parallel plane of the multiverse.
and the airports are in queens, so if you wanna get out... though i guess you could end up in Newark too. I love the cemeteries, rented a car last summer just to go check them out.
That's a great opening, Gordon. I wouldn't have known that's where folks are buried if you hadn't explained it just now, and even then, being thick as I am, I still had a few moments to appreciate the opening lines before making the connection, and they were good nevertheless.
Are we doing our own? Or stories we've read? My own personal favorite opening was for a poem I wrote. But I love the opening so much I may scrap the rest of the poem and use it as a prompt and opening line for a noir tale.
"His hands look like skunk roadkill stinks."
"The sky above the port was the color of television, tuned to a dead channel." William Gibson
"Mallen woke up with the needle still in his arm." Robert K Lewis
I really love those short punchy first sentences.
I wrote one that went sort of like, "Julie wanted a certain rewind, but everything went fast forward."
How I met her was, how I got this scar...
I disagree; that's intrguing as hell. It has a John Dies at the End type vibe.
The first line of my first novel was "My earliest memory is shitting the bathtub." I got a lot of good response to that one, because in addition to sounding silly and irreverent, is surprisingly relevant to what follows as well.
^ ha ha, gordon, that one got my attention.
not fucking with the dark elements also grabs you, i like it.
this thread has gotten me thinking that i need to change my opening... and how to do it... hmmmm...
Stephen A, it is intriguing. Especially if you can hold out on telling us why for a short while.
Well I'd say it is more about the opening phrase or sentence, and less about the first 10 words, because my favorite is still the first 12 of "The Gunslinger" by Stephen King.
The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed.
Dave I love your opening. I'm currently having trouble getting the "hook" in my first few paragraphs. I think I describe too much, which is good in some ways, but I need to get better at getting a fast hook and more plotting.
Stephen, to me it's mildly intriguing, but reads like just one of the many in a long line of YA crapfests about magic. I could be wrong, but opinions never are. :)