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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated February 7, 2014 - 7:42am

I think for me it was the following.

Mostly good, but it sounds a lot like a country song.  I’m not making fun of you, I listen to country music.  I’m being literal, this really has a lot of the cadence and terms you’d hear in early 21st century country music.

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SConley from Texas is reading Coin Locker Babies February 7, 2014 - 8:08am

I've had some interesting ones.

 

It's very hard to isolate the great writing from the piss poor nature of your stillborn characters and the lethargic drivel they talk about. High marks.

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ReneeAPickup from Southern California is reading Wanderers by Chuck Wendig February 7, 2014 - 7:55pm

More meth.

That was one of my first bits of official editorial feed back at Revolt Daily, haha.

Oh, that was one I've given. One I've received? I can't think of one that was weird but not insulting. I laugh and laugh that an editor who rejected what has become my most popular story hated it. Like really, genuinely hated the fuck out of that story. He said it "bordered on scatalogical". 

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Jose F. Diaz from Boston is reading Wolf Hall by Hilary Mantel February 7, 2014 - 8:31pm

Have you ever met a metaphor you didn't like?

One of my professors when I submitted a short story.

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Gordon Highland from Kansas City is reading Secondhand Souls by Christopher Moore February 7, 2014 - 11:20pm

Here's one I've given at least thrice, on the importance of hyphenating compound adjectives for clarity.

It's the difference between a big-ass fucking backseat and a big ass-fucking backseat.

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Crescendo2020 from Redlands, Ca is reading Not enough of all of them. February 8, 2014 - 5:35am

A writer friend who I critique for had me give him feedback for some music of his.

It's like the auditory version of watching TV snow.

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drea from Rural Alberta, Canada is reading between the lines February 8, 2014 - 7:29am

It's (the dialogue in a sex scene) reminiscent of where Molly Shannon makes out with the tree in SuperStar. 

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V.R.Stone from London is reading Savages by Don Winslow February 8, 2014 - 8:01am

I got this in the workshop this week:

"My only real gripe is that Sarah talked too much in the rape scene."

It makes perfect sense in context, but out of context I can't stop laughing at it....

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated February 8, 2014 - 10:49pm

@Renee - The idea was ones you've given, you got it right.

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ReneeAPickup from Southern California is reading Wanderers by Chuck Wendig February 9, 2014 - 12:40am

And then I went ahead and fucked it up...

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Dwayne from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updated February 9, 2014 - 6:01am

So, the norm?

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Jack Campbell Jr. from Lawrence, KS is reading American Rust by Phillipp Meyer February 9, 2014 - 7:50am

This was feedback from a reader, rather than another writer. My grandpa died, and I wrote a sort of eulogy for him on my blog. It went viral, or at least viral for my hometown. Paper copies were passed around, the library put it on display, and people asked for permission to use parts for their funerals. I gained a lot of followers because of it. So the next time I wrote something and had it published, they all read it. My fiction is not nearly as feel good. This particular story was about a guy that cut a woman's legs off trying to make the perfect corpse.

I went back home, and went with my parents to church. As I walked in the door, this 80 year-old lady glares at me, shakes her head and says to my mom, "I'll pray for you." Then she walks away, still glaring.

I consider it a win.

The orignal blog also got me a friend of my grandpa's who gave me a hug, tears in his eyes, and said "How in the Hell did we produce you out of our piece of shit school?" One of the best compliments I've ever had.

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SConley from Texas is reading Coin Locker Babies February 10, 2014 - 6:22am

These are great

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Thuggish from Vegas is reading Day of the Jackal February 12, 2014 - 9:27pm

This thread has caused me to google "scatalogical," remember Molly Shannon (there's a blast from the past), reconsider looking for hyphenated words more, and write a note-to-self (it's working!) to call my grandpa(s) this week.

And to wonder if women do or don't talk much when getting raped.

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V.R.Stone from London is reading Savages by Don Winslow February 13, 2014 - 12:26am

Thuggish - Sarah is the one doing it, not having it done to her....

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Dmcleod from Florida is reading Molloy February 13, 2014 - 12:29am

This thread is hilarious

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Thuggish from Vegas is reading Day of the Jackal February 13, 2014 - 7:16pm

VR-

Even more interesting, now I still wonder the thing before, but also how a woman is raping someone, and if it was another woman, or a man..?

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Dmcleod from Florida is reading Molloy February 14, 2014 - 12:15am

Thuggish, you should read the chapter.

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KarenRunge from South Africa is reading Blindness February 14, 2014 - 12:43am

Gosh darn, can I read it?? I've heard of women raping men and women with strap-ons, if that helps anyone...?

Intrigued!

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Adam Jenkins from Bracknell, England is reading RCX Magazine (Issue 1 coming soon) February 14, 2014 - 1:23am

Being the person that gave that particular feedback to V.R.Stone (hands down the strangest feedback I've ever given), I would certainly recommend his chapters to anyone.

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V.R.Stone from London is reading Savages by Don Winslow February 14, 2014 - 3:24am

Karen, I PM'd you. Maybe I should go into the porno business, sell that chapter for 99c in the Kindle store...

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Thuggish from Vegas is reading Day of the Jackal February 14, 2014 - 9:44am

^ don't leave me out of this

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V.R.Stone from London is reading Savages by Don Winslow February 14, 2014 - 10:22am

Thuggish - I actually don't enjoy the scene when I read it without other strands of the story happening around it or without the suspense of the build up involving the victim. I will be looking for beta readers to take a look at the whole novel later in the year though...

However, for a fee, I'll write you a story about whatever you want...

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Thuggish from Vegas is reading Day of the Jackal February 14, 2014 - 10:52pm

oh my, what kind of fee we talking about here?