I wrote this story quickly for a friend who is starting a new Zine. I am not happy with it but he is ready to publish "as is" because it is due this week.
I did my own LBL for practice because I had never done one and because I have specific questions regarding parts of the story. The LBL and formatted version is attached to the last post.
I know everyone is busy but any help at all will be very very helpful. I don't want to put out a piece of shit just because my friend wants to fill his Zine.
****sorry if this shouldn't have been a thread, I didn't know how else to beg. :-)
Is your story in the workshop? What story are you referring to here?
A new zine is the perfect place to send a shitty story. It's either that or trash it. Or write something better, no use polishing a turd. But either way, I'm sure me or some other workshoppers will take a look if you posted it over there.
Is it in the workshop?
It's in workshop
I'll take a gander
I'll leave your notes in place, go through with mine and then comment on yours as well. K?
That would be great
I am on page 17, so you should get it shortly. It should be just about ready to be published, I only noticed some minor things.
My lbl and comment are up. The are purely suggestions of course, but I think you've got a GREAT central idea that deals with relationships and gender. I don't want to rewrite or derail you from your story, but I had suggestions that cut the story down to the meaningful scenes and the theme of make-up. I hope it's helpful.
I hope to have something for you tonight. I read it and the core idea is great. I just hope I do t have the same comments as Howie. I'm a word economist, so I'll have a lot of places where you could cut words. But, overall, very enjoyable.
Thanks so much for taking the time to help me. :-)