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Great job fellas.
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Wow--really well done, you two! Enjoyed them both!
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Nice, I had a sense of how the first one was going to end. The second one, no clue. Both were really well done.
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Bump
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These are great. Twas not an easy decission at all. Great work guys.
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SP: how did you get those cats to cooperate? :)
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I am a cat whisperer. Someday, I will direct my army of cat-minions to burn the capitols of every nation to the ground in a massive cat-astrophe... and erect a purrfect Palace for me, the supreme emperor of the world.
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Nicely done, fellas.
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You guys are inspirational!!
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SP: have you taught the cats how to use the can opener yet?
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What the fuck?
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I give up. What the fuck?
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I don't know. Ask the Utah.
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I've never been in one of these Thunderdome threads before. So … do voters actually discuss the stories, or just keep WTF-bumping each other?
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No, I don't mind either. Bring the pain!
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Maybe just from here on down in the thread, anyone who hasn't read both stories, GO READ BOTH FUCKING STORIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Then continue enjoying our witty repartee where you left off.
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Both made creative use of the prompt, which always fascinates me, seeing the direction those take. While the Arnold Layne one had perhaps the more unexpected trajectory, and some effective, well-written paranoia, the character namings instantly pulled me out the story—as such a technique always does—because then I start wondering how many of its other elements are derivative, and then I can no longer focus on the story for its own merits, so distracted am I by the homage … meaning I couldn't vote for it.
The panther story, I struggled to grasp what was going on in the opening scene, who was where and why they were acting that way, etc. But once we moved beyond that, I dug the rest. Like Grig, I thought I knew how it might end (in the "Chekhov's gun" sense), but it took enough of a turn to satisfy me, and I shared their terror when shots rang out.
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They're all named after Pink Floyd-isms, and you've got Syd's well-documented descent into madness, etc.
The other story, I thought the truck was delivering the fencing itself, and couldn't understand some of the lingo and why all the tension around that. Reading it for a second time, it's much clearer. I couldn't tell if the driver and his ladyfriend were still inside the cab or where, people were looking up/down at one another, etc. confused me. It started getting clearer around the time the blood poured.
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I voted!
Great stories, guys.
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Bumpty Dumpty
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That BUMP in the night? Yeah... that was me, under your bed, sharpening a shard of steel to shank you with if you don't fuckin' read the stories and vote!!!
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Done and done.
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More than four full days and we get only 8 total votes??? This is why I shied away from here in the first place. C'mon, people, it doesn't cost anything, obviously.
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I feel ya. Eight reads? Psssh. I can get almost that many by being published in a lit zine.
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LOVE Bane, and his lil chant - that is one badass bump right there!
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B
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Funny how there are eight people battling, and only eight votes... Everyone on the site knows that they don't have to be currently battling to read a damn story and vote, right???
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@SP: Hold on, I'm just finishing up reading the second one---had a lot going on. And thanks again for showing me how to attach a photo to the comment box! You're great!
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And Happy Father's Day to all you dads this Sunday!!
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Good stories. Great job, guys.
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SP, at least 3 of your votes are from non battle contestants (me, Gordon and justwords)
But yeah, it sucks.
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Oh, ok, that does make me feel slightly better. :)
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Suriooslee? Waddup wit dee dooble posties? Toopid glitcheese.
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