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Bobby Detrick from Bakersfield CA is reading World War Z and The Hunger Games March 19, 2012 - 3:37pm

I'm slowly working on my query letter as I write my novel. I'm hitting up the masses to get feed back on my hook. Let me know what you think.

“So a drug lord, a slacker and a baby break into a store.” sounds like the start of a good joke, but during a Zombie pandemic this situation becomes reality for slacker Seth Walsh who may end up becoming the punchline.

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aliensoul77 from a cold distant star is reading the writing on the wall. March 19, 2012 - 3:58pm

Sounds like a Seth Rogan movie.

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Bobby Detrick from Bakersfield CA is reading World War Z and The Hunger Games March 19, 2012 - 4:08pm

LOL great comment :)

 

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avery of the dead from Kentucky is reading Cipher Sisters March 19, 2012 - 4:10pm

Well, I could be wrong...but I think you need a comma after the word 'Walsh'.  Or maybe a dash? 

 

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Bobby Detrick from Bakersfield CA is reading World War Z and The Hunger Games March 19, 2012 - 4:26pm

Looking at it I think your right. Thanks doll.

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Bradley Sands from Boston is reading Greil Marcus's The History of Rock 'N' Roll in Ten Songs March 19, 2012 - 5:06pm

No comma. No period. No nothing.

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Bobby Detrick from Bakersfield CA is reading World War Z and The Hunger Games March 19, 2012 - 7:42pm

In the writters workshop i attend commas are always a debate