Can someone look over this revision? Nothing lengthy required...
Soulless
April 25, 2014 - 12:31am
Hi everyone,
I have a story in the workshop called Stella (2,600 words) which needs some feedback. It's sci-fi/horror and it contains a little bit of alien sex. If you help me out I promise to get back to you nice and quick. ;)
S
Dave Cummins
from Ireland
April 28, 2014 - 8:16am
Hey everyone,
I have a noir flash piece up in workshop right now, it's called 'The Pier' and it's 700 words long.
It's my first foray into writing a piece of noir - I'm actually quite proud of it - anyone interested in this kind of fiction I'd appreciate if you could take a look at it, and let me know whether I should be proud or not haha.
Dave
Andrew Irwin
from Lake Macquarie, Australia is reading everything he possibly can. April 30, 2014 - 9:43am
Hey everyone,
There's a short 1700 word story up at the moment called The Boy and the Man; whilst I find it extraordinarily hard to describe the piece without giving away too much, I guess you could say its about society, relationships and our perceptions. Whilst being written spontaneously one night, it was also written in a ready deliberate style and with a purpose. I need to know if I've accomplished that, and if not, where I'm failing, in order to rewrite it for submissions.
Please check it out, in the past 3 days I've reviewed eight works and would really appreciate another two or three reviews of my own piece.
Xander Davis
from Downtown Tycho, The Moon is reading Casino Royale / Tomorrow NowMay 7, 2014 - 11:23am
Hey guys—
I've got a novelette up that needs beta readers. Put it through the wringer.
Within City Limits (7750 words) — In a nanoprinter global economy, Crane is a picker, hired by vastly wealthy clients as a thief of vintage antiques in the old world, sent to a rural slum in northwestern Ohio to find rusting treasure.
I'm also interested in your thoughts on genre. You could say it's cyberpunk, but I didn't really write it that way. To me, I just wrote a noir thriller set a few decades down the timeline.
It's a piece that examines what the impact will be of a post-nanoprinter economy, based on the rise of automation, drones, 3D printers and other tech we have today. This project started with me actually just doing a thought experiment on what my rural hometown in Celina, Ohio would look like down the timeline in the face of these developments. Would love to have your feedback.
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksAugust 28, 2014 - 2:13pm
After giving to LitReactor (as the Managing Editor) for three-plus years, I'm finally going to take! I've submitted my first short story to the workshop.
A dystopian, coming-of-age story in which a young man discovers a book, meets a girl, and leaves his whole world behind.
I'll be returning the favor for any reviews, and I'll also be reviewing as many randos as I can. I'll probably start with the most recent ones posted in this thread, so if you've got a story that needs some love, let me know.
Aud Fontaine
from the mountains is reading Catch-22. Since like, always.August 31, 2014 - 12:29pm
Nathan Scalia
from Kansas is reading so many thingsSeptember 6, 2014 - 9:52pm
Bah, if Josh is going in, I might as well find the time as well. Somebody's got to earn the Official Critic badge. Might as well be this guy.
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksSeptember 8, 2014 - 5:14am
Do it.
You still looking for reviews on your latest, Nathan?
Nathan Scalia
from Kansas is reading so many thingsSeptember 8, 2014 - 5:36am
Bah, no, I don't think so. It's been a while. I've been tinkering with something last week, so I'll see about getting that up soon.
Bah.
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksSeptember 8, 2014 - 6:33am
Let me know. Bah.
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksOctober 18, 2014 - 12:26pm
You jumped in or what, Nathan?
I'm in with story #2. It is a weird little story about amputation and family dynamics. Like last time, I will be returning the favor on any reviews, so let me know what your most recent story is or what needs attention. Can't wait to read your notes. Thanks, guys!
Jimothy Scott
from Canada is reading The wise mans fearJuly 7, 2015 - 5:07pm
When I joined Litreactor (oh so long ago) I was impressed by the amount of reviews and timely responses everyone received. So what happened? Your balls fall off? I know it is summer and the weather is all nice but come on. That being said:
Jimothy Scott
from Canada is reading The wise mans fearJuly 12, 2015 - 10:09am
Think of all the points you could be having
Dwayne
from Cincinnati, Ohio (suburbs) is reading books that rotate to often to keep this updatedJuly 13, 2015 - 4:09pm
It goes in waves man. Someone will say, "I'm going to workshop," and 20 of the rest of us follow them right in. This is a low point, but it'll pick back up.
Jimothy Scott
from Canada is reading The wise mans fearJuly 23, 2015 - 10:32pm
It's not the work shop but everyone should read and vote on the thunderdome battle between Matt Myth and I
rachel1121
from Colorado is reading anything I can get my hands on.August 6, 2015 - 1:43pm
Do you find yourself thinking, gosh I'm kinda bored. Perhaps I should review something no one else has. Well you can! It's right here. I'm starting my job again next week, but I will read and respond to anything as soon as I can. Many thanks!
Nick J Jones
from New Zealand is reading The Bell Jar by Sylvia PlathNovember 17, 2015 - 3:29am
Hi guys,
New to this and would really appreciate some feedback from folks. I've got two pieces up now in the workshop. One is my short story "Train Tracks" which was a finalist in the NZ Writers College Short Story Comp, the other is a chapter excerpt from my novel that I've been chipping away at for three years called "Totally Depraved!"
Please check them out and give me any tips. I take constructive criticism well!
Train Tracks
1683 words
Transgressive/short story
NZ Writers College Short Story Finalist
Totally Depraved! Novel Extract
1628 words
Transgressive/Coming-of-age/long form fiction
Will be reading this at the upcoming NZ LGBTQ Writers Festival in Feb 2016
T. Dagarim
from Atlanta, GA
November 21, 2015 - 11:45am
Hi guys,
I joined the site recently to get some peer reviews. I submitted my first short story here, Samael and the Almost Perfect.
It hasn't received a review yet, so I'd love a review if anyone has an opportunity.
Z L Harvey
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksNovember 22, 2015 - 2:03pm
Got a new story in the workshop. I will be returning all reviews, and reading as much else as I can.
Some of you may remember it from the Thunderdome. I've done a bit of work on it since then, and I hope you enjoy.
Nathan
Sheri Attani Ro...
from San Jose, CA is reading The Blindfold by Siri HustvedtMay 22, 2016 - 5:14pm
Hi. I'm new and have submitted a short story called Viand. It's about 4,300 words and is Horror. Any help I can get improving it would be greatly appreciated. I'm not sure if I overdid the sexuality. Also, I'm unsure of my writing in some places especially the ending. I've never written a fight scene before. Thanks. https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/viand
Joshua Chaplinsky
from New York is reading Library BooksMay 23, 2016 - 3:29pm
Hey! I actually just reviewed Viand.
JeffreyGrantBarr
from Oregon is reading https://www.goodreads.com/review/list/10268733-jeff-barr?shelf=currently-readingMay 23, 2016 - 4:51pm
I'd just like to say I got some reviews on my submission, and all crits were dead-on and incredibly helpful. Not to mention, each reviewer said the same thing, and when I saw it, the scales fell from my eyes, and I understood why it was broken! Much amaze! So help! I was too close to the story to see the problem, but a few pairs of extra eyeballs (aside from the ones I keep in a jar on my desk) did the trick.
Thanks LR, you're a good egg - a little cracked, a bit scrambled, but just what I needed to make an omelette.
Read me!
Can someone look over this revision? Nothing lengthy required...
Hi everyone,
I have a story in the workshop called Stella (2,600 words) which needs some feedback. It's sci-fi/horror and it contains a little bit of alien sex. If you help me out I promise to get back to you nice and quick. ;)
S
Hey everyone,
I have a noir flash piece up in workshop right now, it's called 'The Pier' and it's 700 words long.
It's my first foray into writing a piece of noir - I'm actually quite proud of it - anyone interested in this kind of fiction I'd appreciate if you could take a look at it, and let me know whether I should be proud or not haha.
Dave
Hey everyone,
There's a short 1700 word story up at the moment called The Boy and the Man; whilst I find it extraordinarily hard to describe the piece without giving away too much, I guess you could say its about society, relationships and our perceptions. Whilst being written spontaneously one night, it was also written in a ready deliberate style and with a purpose. I need to know if I've accomplished that, and if not, where I'm failing, in order to rewrite it for submissions.
Please check it out, in the past 3 days I've reviewed eight works and would really appreciate another two or three reviews of my own piece.
http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-boy-and-the-man
Thanks!
Andy
Hey guys—
I've got a novelette up that needs beta readers. Put it through the wringer.
Within City Limits (7750 words) — In a nanoprinter global economy, Crane is a picker, hired by vastly wealthy clients as a thief of vintage antiques in the old world, sent to a rural slum in northwestern Ohio to find rusting treasure.
http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/within-city-limits
I'm also interested in your thoughts on genre. You could say it's cyberpunk, but I didn't really write it that way. To me, I just wrote a noir thriller set a few decades down the timeline.
It's a piece that examines what the impact will be of a post-nanoprinter economy, based on the rise of automation, drones, 3D printers and other tech we have today. This project started with me actually just doing a thought experiment on what my rural hometown in Celina, Ohio would look like down the timeline in the face of these developments. Would love to have your feedback.
Thanks,
-Xander
read me...
While you're at it read me too.
After giving to LitReactor (as the Managing Editor) for three-plus years, I'm finally going to take! I've submitted my first short story to the workshop.
The Whole Infernal Machine
It's about 4800 words and I describe it thusly:
A dystopian, coming-of-age story in which a young man discovers a book, meets a girl, and leaves his whole world behind.
I'll be returning the favor for any reviews, and I'll also be reviewing as many randos as I can. I'll probably start with the most recent ones posted in this thread, so if you've got a story that needs some love, let me know.
Read, would you kindly...
http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/little-crocodiles-middle-ish-chapter
Bah, if Josh is going in, I might as well find the time as well. Somebody's got to earn the Official Critic badge. Might as well be this guy.
Do it.
You still looking for reviews on your latest, Nathan?
Bah, no, I don't think so. It's been a while. I've been tinkering with something last week, so I'll see about getting that up soon.
Bah.
Let me know. Bah.
You jumped in or what, Nathan?
I'm in with story #2. It is a weird little story about amputation and family dynamics. Like last time, I will be returning the favor on any reviews, so let me know what your most recent story is or what needs attention. Can't wait to read your notes. Thanks, guys!
Twice Amputated Foot
It's a longer one. I'd owe you a review
http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/hot-dog-noir
come on. please
You talkin' to me? I'll read it.
lol. YEAH I'm talkin to you!
Thanks Joshua
@Jim - I am doing a LBL of it, but I'm on like page 13 of 33.
good to know thanks dwayne
Getting on this now. Sorry for the delay. This is my latest:
http://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/beyond-the-wall-of-sleep-in-red-hook-...
Hey, all you workshop whorers, did you see the news?
http://litreactor.com/columns/litreactor-community-spotlight-november-2014
Hey everyone,
Just whoring my submission as suggested!
It's a short story with some Sci Fi elements that I'm aiming to submit to a magazine end April. I'd love all the feedback I can get!
Cheers,
R
I've just put in a rewrite of the first story I posted here, hope ye likes it
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/border-blues-redux
hi guys,
This submission looks as though it was overlooked. It's been in the workshop for a few weeks now with no takers. Help Rachel out here.
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/chapter-3
When I joined Litreactor (oh so long ago) I was impressed by the amount of reviews and timely responses everyone received. So what happened? Your balls fall off? I know it is summer and the weather is all nice but come on. That being said:
Low-cut Banits by Wolf has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/low-cut-bandits
The Demon that Haunts at Day has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-demon-that-haunts-at-day
The Snails in the Cathouse by Klay Klayman has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-snails-in-the-cathouse-chapter-o...
Thirty Days of Sober Rage by Hannes Hummus 2 reviews
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/thirty-days-of-sober-rage
And
Chapter 3 by Rachel1121 has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/chapter-3
All are on the first page of the submissions board. Lets get them up!
Update
Vulgarism Philosophy Open has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/vulgarism-philosophy-open
Low-cut Banits by Wolf has 2 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/low-cut-bandits
The Demon that Haunts at Day has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-demon-that-haunts-at-day
The Snails in the Cathouse by Klay Klayman has 2 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-snails-in-the-cathouse-chapter-o...
Thirty Days of Sober Rage by Hannes Hummus 2 reviews
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/thirty-days-of-sober-rage
And
Chapter 3 by Rachel1121 has 1 review
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/chapter-3
Think of all the points you could be having
It goes in waves man. Someone will say, "I'm going to workshop," and 20 of the rest of us follow them right in. This is a low point, but it'll pick back up.
It's not the work shop but everyone should read and vote on the thunderdome battle between Matt Myth and I
Do you find yourself thinking, gosh I'm kinda bored. Perhaps I should review something no one else has. Well you can! It's right here. I'm starting my job again next week, but I will read and respond to anything as soon as I can. Many thanks!
Hi guys,
New to this and would really appreciate some feedback from folks. I've got two pieces up now in the workshop. One is my short story "Train Tracks" which was a finalist in the NZ Writers College Short Story Comp, the other is a chapter excerpt from my novel that I've been chipping away at for three years called "Totally Depraved!"
Please check them out and give me any tips. I take constructive criticism well!
Train Tracks
1683 words
Transgressive/short story
NZ Writers College Short Story Finalist
Totally Depraved! Novel Extract
1628 words
Transgressive/Coming-of-age/long form fiction
Will be reading this at the upcoming NZ LGBTQ Writers Festival in Feb 2016
Hi guys,
I joined the site recently to get some peer reviews. I submitted my first short story here, Samael and the Almost Perfect.
It hasn't received a review yet, so I'd love a review if anyone has an opportunity.
Z L Harvey
Got a new story in the workshop. I will be returning all reviews, and reading as much else as I can.
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-promised-land
IS KANYE WEST DOIN' HIS KANYE BEST?
Hey all.
Open secret: I haven't been published yet, mostly because I haven't had the confidence to submit too much, and yeah.
Looking to change that. So I submitted a story to the workshop for the first time in a while.
Your help would be most appreciated.
https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/the-river-willow
Some of you may remember it from the Thunderdome. I've done a bit of work on it since then, and I hope you enjoy.
Nathan
Hi. I'm new and have submitted a short story called Viand. It's about 4,300 words and is Horror. Any help I can get improving it would be greatly appreciated. I'm not sure if I overdid the sexuality. Also, I'm unsure of my writing in some places especially the ending. I've never written a fight scene before. Thanks. https://litreactor.com/workshop/sub/viand
Hey! I actually just reviewed Viand.
I'd just like to say I got some reviews on my submission, and all crits were dead-on and incredibly helpful. Not to mention, each reviewer said the same thing, and when I saw it, the scales fell from my eyes, and I understood why it was broken! Much amaze! So help! I was too close to the story to see the problem, but a few pairs of extra eyeballs (aside from the ones I keep in a jar on my desk) did the trick.
Thanks LR, you're a good egg - a little cracked, a bit scrambled, but just what I needed to make an omelette.