Courtney
from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooksAugust 18, 2012 - 8:54am
I can't figure out where you skipped a word; I was going to fix it for you, but it's probably too early in the morning for me. Send me a fixed draft if you want, it would bug the shit out of me if I'd done it.
Sound
from Azusa, CA is reading Greener Pastures by Michael WehuntAugust 18, 2012 - 3:09pm
I enjoyed both, but in the end The First Pain got my vote. I liked it's concept and loved the ending. I really liked the fairytale feel and style of Fels and Pelz, though. It was close for me.
Courtney
from the Midwest is reading Monkey: A Journey to the West and a thousand college textbooksAugust 19, 2012 - 8:52am
I don't know if that's a good thing or bad thing. I sincerely hope it wasn't so awful that it made you step back and look at your own dialogue to make sure it wasn't as terrible.