I'm writing a story that is intended to be humorous. Some people believe puns are groaners, yet puns were at one time considered the 'highest form of comedy'. I kinda like them, if they're used well and sparingly...
What are your thoughts on the use of puns?
Second. here's the pun I want to use. Is it grammatically correct?
I have a boy who is sad because he lost a dear family member. James doesn't want to go to the party, because he would rather bereft alone in his room.
"bereft alone" in his room ...
Is that a crack up? Is it even grammatically sound? as in he'd rather morn in his room.
Thanks in advance for any response.
PS: Later in my story an evil man will die and his death will be truly "unbereavable". Funny?
PSS: I only intend to use a few well placed puns throughout the story.
Hmm. I don't know, I like puns but those are both groaners for me. It reads more like a poorly executed parody of a Chinese accent than a good pun.
I questioned the usage, pondered it, typed it out and read it through. I like it. It reads well enough and in context it fits. My gut says to go ahead and use "bereft alone." So, it'll stay.
The other one I'll leave out.
Your examples remind me of portmanteau.
Yes. You're right.
I suppose they're not even puns.
I can say I feel less "ugh" about it with only using "bereft alone" and not "unbereavable". It takes the "wakka wakka" feeling about a Chinese accent joke away.
Is this meant to be in dialogue or...? I mean, obviously, it is hard to gauge how well it will work without seeing it context.
I once had a character that was a wacky, annoying, jokester type and I had him constantly tell puns. That way, if the reader liked puns, they would laugh at what he said; if they didn't , it helped characterize him as irritating and unfunny.
That's a good idea.
Yeah, the puns can be used to flesh out the character but as a comedic device, it wouldn't work. They also break the flow of the story, because when you read a pun, you automatically insert the "wakka wakka" pause, killing the stories momentum. I'd avoid them unless they are in dialouge and the character is meant to be a bit of a cornball.
Not saying those puns are corny, by the way. They are quite clever. Just not as a comedic device.